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Two sketches of mine to be performed locally (1)

Wondering if anyone has any thoughts / suggestions.

This is the first (when I copy and paste it seems to forget all alignments, sorry):

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MEETING ROOM. INT.

The group are seated at the table. MR STONE, TIMOTHY, MARCUS, WILLIAM and JOHN.

MR STONE:
Right. Logo ideas...

TIMOTHY:
Well Mr Stone the three of us (signals to exclude John) have shortlisted it
down to two possible ideas.

MARCUS pulls out a folder. He hands the first logo over. MR STONE scans it whilst TIMOTHY explains.

TIMOTHY:
The first logo is this one. The red, white and blue should conjure up our
nations pride and history whilst...

MR STONE:
(interrupting)
Don't like it. Next.

MR STONE throws it to one side and is handed the second from MARCUS.

MR STONE:
What's this?

As TIMOTHY takes control, MARCUS sneers at him.

TIMOTHY:
This one depicts a man running with the Olympic torch. He is constructed
from the digits 2,0,1 and 2. Or 2012.

As the logo is seen (by the audience) , the numbers clearly read 2015. Nobody picks up on this.

MR STONE:
Nice idea. It's similar to that other one I saw.

TIMOTHY:
Yes Sir, we detected your affection for that concept so went for something
a design that incorporated that in a more mainstream and conventional way.

MR STONE:
(dismissing the advice)
You opted for something blooming boring, that's what you did.

He slams fist down on table. They all gulp, except JOHN.

MR STONE:
Well then. Come on. Show me the one I liked. Quickly, I'm abseiling
with Borris Johnson at six!

WILLIAM:
(cowering)
Unfortunately, we no longer have that design Sir.

MR STONE:
You best find it quick or you'll be joining me and Boris , without a rope.

WILLIAM shrinks in his chair.

JOHN:
Actually, I might have it.

Flicks through his folder and locates the logo, it is the official logo.

JOHN:
Here..

MR STONE:
Good work John. (to self) Ahh,yes. Much more innovative. Bold;
eye-catching. It's out there; a bit crazy; a bit wild. I'll take it.

TIMOTHY:
But Sir. It's not on the shortlist. It's too daring.

MR STONE slams his fist down on the table.

MR STONE:
Too daring?! 'Daring' is my middle name. When I boxed Amir Khan
for charity ... daring. Swam the channel with Gordon Brown ...daring.
Claimed three houses, four holidays and a pet giraffe as expenses ...daring.
Now, it's my under- standing that the head of the committee has the final
decision on all topics of discussion. Doesn't he?

TIMOTHY:
(dejected)
Yes.

MR STONE:
And who's the head of this particular committee?

TIMOTHY:
You are, Sir. Very astute.

MR STONE:
That's that then. (calmer) And as I have the final say it seems I have a
decision to make.

Talking aloud to self, as if straight at the audience.

MR STONE:
... the safe option ; largely accepted and conventional. Or...

Holds up the design and points at it.

MR STONE:
This... (smiling at camera, winks) I think the answer's obvious.

Don't get it. Sorry.

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