British Comedy Guide

Skit Comp 1-8.6.09

Good stuff as usual and congratulats to MR SUNSHINE for winnin'! Enjoy, have 10 points and PM me for next week's subject please...
Hence:

Votes - Points - Name

8 - 10 - Mr Sunshine
3 - 5 - Craig H
2 - 1 - Timbo
Special mention: Badge, Cool Mikado, Nil Putters

Your new subject: PAIN (chosen by Alex Mahon)
Rules:
One entry per person. Can be a sketch, joke, lyric or anything along those lines. Please try and only post your entry/vote and no other posts.
You can edit your entry as much as you want, up until the closing time.

Competition Closes: 8.6.10

Overall Leader Board is now:

Points - Name

139 - Mr Sunshine
123 - Cool Mikado
111 - Chris Forshaw
107 - Otterfox
103 - Frankie
99 - Nigel Kelly
98 - Fred Peters
90 - Michael Monkhouse
83 - Kasm
82 - Charley Rance
79 - Timbo
66 - Jude
65 - Baumski
54 - Scratchyr
51 - Angiebaby
37 - Gerry McDonnell
35 - Afinkawan
32 - Swerytd
32 - Paul Watson
28 - Leevil
26 - Alex Mahon
22 - Blobster
21 - Mikey J
26 - David Chapman
20 - James Harris
20 - Blobster
20 - Roscoff
20 - Kevin Murphy
20 - Dannyjb1
20 - Niteowl
20 - Lazzard
18 - Tom
17 - Ellie
16 - Eggie
15 - Bushbaby
15 - Cinnamon
15 - Dale
12 - Geoff Mutton
12 - Badge
11 - Steven
11 - Will Cam
10 - Robo
10 - Nitram Skir
10 - Socrates
10 - Tom Campbell
10 - Tommy Power
10 - Waring
09 - ajp29
09 - ShoePie
08 - Stylo
07 - Craig H
07 - The Giggle-O
07 - James
07 - garyd
07 - Winterlight
06 - Little Jersey Devil
06 - Hellboy
06 - Wayne Lewis
06 - John Kelly
06 - Andrew Lynch
05 - Craig H
05 - Karlos the Great
05 - Nil Putters
05 - Drew
05 - Pedros
05 - Summer G
05 - Mannikin Bird
05 - Tumble
05 - Greggles
05 - Happy Shopper
05 - Timothy Marshal-Nichols
05 - Rob B
04 - Andy W
04 - losaavedra
02 - Stephen Birch
02 - Stu R
02 - Imamazed
02 - Slack Bladder
02 - Paul Nash
02 - Boits
02 - Gavin
01 - Ming The Mirthless
01 - Minty
01 - Shpadoinkle
01 - Shaggy292
01 - amillionpounds
01 - Jake How
01 - David Bussell
01 - Charisma
01 - Skibbington von Skubber
01 - Ginger Jesus
01 - Nick Rivers
01 - Daddy Maz
01 - Martin Bickle
01 - Batman
01 - Ray Dawson
01 - Marion
01 - Tooting Jo

Spot any mistakes? There may well be, I'm a tinker's cuss, so PM me. Thanks...

INT. DAY- MODEST KITCHEN/DINER. 40 YEAR OLD PLAIN LOOKING JULIE IS SEEN FROM THE WAIST UP BEHIND A BREAKFAST BAR SEPERATING THE KITCHEN FROM THE DINING AREA. BEHIND HER THE OVEN IS ON WITH SOMETHING COOKING. ON THE WORKTOP IS A PILE OF HALF FINISHED SLIPPERS WITH A SEPERATE PILE OF FUR EDGING. ONE SLIPPER HAS THE EDGING HALF STICHED ON WITH A BIG NEEDLE VISABLE. THERE IS A CORDLESS PHONE IN FRONT OF HER WHICH STARTS TO RING

JULIE (ANSWERING PHONE - WE CAN"T HEAR THE CALLER):
Hi Sis....Oh nothing really, just got Dave's dinner on...........Yeah the kids are fine, Molly's got church choir tonight and James is helping out at the Elderly Centre....(LOOKS AT PILE OF SLIPPERS, PULLS QUIZZICAL FACE, SPEAKING SLOWLY). It's.. going.. ok , but I'm not really sure about working from home.

JULIE PICKS UP ONE OF THE FUR TRIMS AND STARTS TO FIDDLE WITH IT WHILE SHE CONTINUES:
I Mean, the extra money is handy, and its not exactly rocket science.

A KITCHEN TIMER SHAPED LIKE A PEPPER STARTS TO RING IN FRONT OF HER. JULIE LOOKS ROUND AT THE OVEN:

JULIE : Oh, hang on a sec sis..

SHE PLACES THE PHONE AND FUR DOWN AND TURNS OFF THE TIMER. SHE PICKS UP AN OPEN BOOKLET LOOKING FROM IT TO THE OVEN A FEW TIMES BEFORE READING OUT LOUD:

JULIE: Leave for twenty minutes then beat...

JULIE THEN WALKS AROUND THE SIDE OF THE BREAKFAST BAR (IGNORING THE COOKER) REVEALING THAT SHE IS WEARING A LEATHER MINI SKIRT, STOCKINGS AND THIGH LENGTH BOOTS. THE CAMERA PANS ROUND TO FOLLOW HER AND WE SEE A NAKED GIMP MASKED FAT MALE CHAINED SPREAD-EAGLED TO A LARGE BONDAGE CROSS ON THE DINING AREA WALL. JULIE WALKS UP TO HIM, STOPS TO CONSULT THE BOOKLET VERY BRIEFLY AND GIVES HIM AN ALMIGHTY KICK IN THE BALLS WHICH GIVES OFF A SICKENING SOUND. THE MAN GIVES A LONG MUFFLED GROAN. SHE LOOKS BACK IN THE BOOKLET THEN VERY DELIBERETLY TWEAKS EACH NIPPLE IN TURN CAUSING MORE MUFFLED SCREAMS. JULIE CLOSES THE BOOKLET, LOOKING QUITE PLEASED WITH HERSELF, CASUALLY WALKS BACK AROUND THE BREAKFAST BAR, PICKS UP THE TIMER, RESETS IT, AND PICKS UP THE PHONE:

JULIE: I think I'll give it to the end of the week, and then I might try something else. (PUSHING ALL THE SLIPPERS AND FUR TO ONE SIDE) I do wish Dave would stop leaving his stuff all over the place.

ENDS

DOCTOR: Bad news, you've lost the use of your legs. Good news, you're in the next Lady Gaga video.

EXT.MAIN ROAD.DAY

A MARATHON RUNNER IS SITTING ON THE ROAD RUBBING HIS LEG AND TRYING TO STRETCH HIS FOOT. HELENA, A ST. JOHN'S AMBULANCE BRIGADE WORKER WALKS SILENTLY INTO SHOT. THE RUNNER LOOKS UP AND IS STARTLED BY HER SUDDEN APPEARANCE

HELENA
Hello, are you in pain?

MARATHON RUNNER
I think its cramp

HELENA
Oh dear. Shall I take a look?

MARATHON RUNNER
Yes, please

HELENA
Yes please mistress

THE MAN LOOKS UP CONFUSED

MARATHON RUNNER
What?

HELENA STANDS ON HIS OTHER LEG REVEALING A BLACK, LEATHER HIGH-HEELED BOOT

MARATHON RUNNER
Owwww

HELENA
Yes. Please. Mistress

MARATHON RUNNER
Yes please mistress!

HELENA
That's better

HELENA TAKES HER FOOT OFF HIS LEG, KNEELS DOWN AND TAKES A HOLD OF HIS INJURED CALF

HELENA
Does it hurt when I do this?

MARATHON RUNNER
Ow, yes!... I mean, yes mistress

HELENA
What about that?

MARATHON RUNNER
Ahhh, Yes mistress

HELENA
And that?

HELENA GIVES HIS FOOT A PARTICULARLY VICIOUS TWIST

MARATHON RUNNER
Arrrrrrrrrrr!

FROM OUT OF SHOT COMES ANOTHER WOMAN'S VOICE

VOICE
Helena! Stop that at once!

HELENA JUMPS BACK TO HER FEET AND STEPS AWAY WITH HER HEAD BOWED AS IT CUTS TO EVELYNNE, ANOTHER MORE SENIOR ST. JOHN'S AMBULANCE BRIGADE WORKER WHO WALKS SLOWLY UP TO THE RUNNER

EVELYNNE
My apologies, I'll make sure that Helena is properly disciplined when we get back to head quarters

HELENA CLOSES HER EYES, BREATHES HEAVILY AND LOOKS DELIGHTED BY THE NEWS. EVELYN BENDS DOWN AND TAKES THE MANS CALF IN HER HAND AND EXAMINES IT

EVELYNNE (sounding very professional)
Now then, tell me, does that hurt?

MARATHON RUNNER
Yes

EVELYNNE (looking strangely into the mans eyes)
Good

THE RUNNER GLANCES DOWN AND NOTICES THAT EVELYNNE IS WETTING HERSELF

I thought I'd try some of that Cage Fighting. So I told him he was shit in Con-Air and kicked him in the 'nads.

I found out that my wife had been having an affair. I wanted to harm her, anyway, after I calmed down a bit I ended up making a voodoo doll of her and proceeded to stick in some pins. It didn't have the desired effect though, I suppose the fact that she is the bed of nails champion may have something to do with it.

I hated my last boss so much that I made a voodoo doll of him... but then I remembered I'm self-employed.

REX LOGAN AND THE ISLAND OF SMURGOON

NARRATOR:
It was the light of the sun filtering through the trees that woke Rex Logan. He remembered getting to the island of Smurgoon but then all went blank.

How long had he been out? What had caused his black-out and how was the sun filtering through trees when he was lying in an open field with no trees in it?

PAN OUT TO SHOW REX IN A BIG FIELD. HE LOOKS UP AT THE SUN AND WE CUT TO P.O.V. WITH THE SUN STREAMING THROUGH TREES. HE WALKS ALONG LOOKING UP INTERMITTANTLY, SLIGHTLY CONFUSED.

His head was pounding as a million thoughts raced through his mind.

CLOSE UP OF REX WITH A VACANT LOOK ON HIS FACE.

The disappearance of his detective partner Mick Nash had brought him here. Five days had passed since the last message had been received from Mick. Five long days, but strangely only two nights.

His final message had mentioned lemons and dust, shadow men and barley. Was this the ramblings of a madman or some sort of coded message. Rex had to find out and fast.

He ran into a dense forest weaving expertly around the trees. He had navigated through such terrain countless times and was now something of an expert so it was all the more surprising when he fell helplessly over a steep ravine landing directly on his toenails, smashing them to bits.

FX OF GLASS SHATTERING.

The pain seared up through his legs circling around his knees twice, danced through his crotch and lodged in his nose. Seizing his chance he quickly sneezed, ridding himself of the pain.

Rex now found himself at the mouth of a cave. He cautiously entered. He knew that many possible dangers lay ahead as well as many impossible ones but he had gone too far now, there was no turning back.

AS THIS IS BEING SAID WE SEE REX SECOND-GUESSING HIMSELF AND IS ABOUT TO TURN BACK BUT FEELS OBLIGATED TO GO ON WHEN THE NARRATOR SAYS THAT HE CANNOT TURN BACK.

As he stepped forward a faint voice could be heard deep from within the cave.

VOICE:
...And the bringer of barley comes when the sun smirks upon all his nephews but beware for the claw of a once promising young crow can smear what awaits for kings from all the seas of the ocean....

NARRATOR:
The word 'barley'. Just like in Mick's final message, thought Rex. I am definitely on the right trail.

He could now see the source of the voice. A man with a strange mask dressed in a long robe with a strong light shining directly on him, casting a huge shadow on the wall behind him.

He seemed to be preaching to all manner of strange creatures such as a man with antlers, several people wearing masks and a black swan.

Rex settled behind a large rock struggling to make sense of the situation.

VOICE:
When you feel your mind turn yellow and when a large rock answers the question you never asked remember that all beings are one, I mean are two, sometimes three or nine... All beings are nine. When the time comes take the aforementioned lemons that I now mention for the first time and plan..

NARRATOR:
Rex shuffled in his position but slipped off the rock landing heavily with a large crash.

FX OF POTS AND PANS LANDING ON A TILED FLOOR.

NARRATOR:
The preacher looked in Rex's direction.

PREACHER:
Who falls there?

NARRATOR:
Rex gingerly stood up rubbing his backside which had been skinned badly on a rock.

REX LOOKS AT CAMERA.

REX:
(PUT OUT BY NARRATORS COMMENTS) It's actually not skinned. It's just am...just hurt a bit.

PREACHER:
Who talks there? What are you?

REX:
I am a human man. My name is Rex Logan and I am looking for my friend Mick Nash.

PREACHER:
We do not know this Micknash you speak of.

REX:
Michael Nash?

PREACHER:
Oooh Micksey Dixey. The mountain sprout, the timeout, the urban whirl, twineboy, roaster rock..

REX:
A-are...do you...Are you referring to Mick Nash or are you just...just naming things at random?

PREACHER:
You must come with me Rex Logan.

THE PREACHER STEPS OUT OF THE GLARE OF THE LIGHT BUT THE LONG SHADOW REMAINS ATTACHED TO HIM LIKE A TALL BLACK HAT.

HE TAKES REX TO A PRIVATE AREA.

REX:
I'm looking for Mick Nash. Where is he?

PREACHER:
Perhaps Mick Nash is a lot closer than you think.

THE PREACHER TAKES OFF HIS MASK.

He's just behind you.

MICK APPEARS FROM BEHIND REX.

REX:
Mick! Thank God! (he turns back to the preacher) Who are you?

PREACHER:
I can't believe you don't know who I am. I'm hurt, physically hurt that you don't know me. I'm actually hurt.

MICK:
We don't have time for this. They're going to know something is up. We've got to get out of here now!

NARRATOR:
The trio ran back out the dark cave. Rex stumbled over a rock and landed in a heap on the ground.

FX OF MARBLES HITTING THE GROUND.

This time Rex was in pain and was going have to be helped out of the cave, and fast as there were now all manner of creatures in hot pursuit.

The pain was in Rex's wrists, causing him to limp heavily and this time the pain wasn't moving to any part of his body where he could expel it.

The preacher and Nash deliberated as to what was the best way to carry Rex. The preacher put Rex's arms around him, leaving Mick free, then Mick put one arm around the preachers waist and left Rex in a crumpled heap. This didn't work either.

Mick then held Rex's arm and the preachers foot but they were getting nowhere fast. Finally they hit upon it. They put Rex's arms over each of their shoulders and ran with the strange creatures now just 20 yards behind.

PREACHER:
I still can't believe you don't know me Rex!

NARRATOR:
They raced to the boat, piled in and sped away just as the creatures of Smurgoon reached the shore.

CLOSE UP OF THE PREACHER IN THE BACK OF THE BOAT.

PREACHER:
So Logan and Nash had escaped the clutches of Smurgoon but it would not be long before their next adventure would land them in even more hot water.... but you have to wonder how far they would have got if it wasn't for me....their narrator. Farewell.

SLIGHT SMIRK ON NARRATORS FACE AS THE BOAT SPEEDS OFF INTO THE DISTANCE.

END.

A MAN DRESSED IN A SKIN TIGHT LYCRA TYPE FABRIC STANDS SURROUNDED BY A CROWD.

MAN IN SUIT
Ladies and gentleman, what we have here is the latest in state of the art technology. A snug fitting, superlightweight suit of defence.

HECKLER
It looks like a swimsuit!

MAN IN SUIT
Yes, well I suppose it does. However, this suit my friend is the equivalent to being guarded by 8 tonnes of reinforced steel at all times. Quite simply it makes you impenetrable.

HECKLER
Big waow, my wife is impenetrable.

MAN IN SUIT
Indeed. But can your wife withstand -

A MAN WALKS ON WITH A BASEBALL BAT, CLOBBERING THE MAN IN SUIT SEVERAL TIMES ACROSS THE CHEST

MAN IN SUIT (cont)
A baseball bat!

A MAN WALKS ON WITH A KNIFE ATTEMPTING TO STAB THE MAN IN SUIT

MAN IN SUIT (cont)
A knife!

A MAN WALKS ON WITH A MACHINE GUN, SHOOTING CONTINOUSLY AT THE MAN IN SUIT.

MAN IN SUIT (cont)
A machine gun!

A MAN WALKS ON WITH A CHAINSAW

MAN IN SUIT (cont)
A chainsaw!

THE HECKLER WALKS UP TO THE MAN IN SUIT, EXAMING THE SUIT CLOSELY

HECKLER
There's only one flaw

MAN IN SUIT
Sir, I'm afraid that is where you are wrong. There is in fact not one, yes ladies and gentleman not one -

THE HECKLER PUNCHES THE MAN IN SUIT TO THE GROUND

HECKLER
It stops at the neck

THE GRUMBLING CROWD DISPERSE

INT - A SMALL BOY IS STANDING OUTSIDE HIS PARENTS' BEDROOM WITH HIS EAR TO THE DOOR

MOM'S VOICE:
Oh John, it's beginning to hurt

DAD'S VOICE:
You can take it

MOM'S VOICE:
Just take it out

DAD'S VOICE:
I'm nearly there.

MOM'S VOICE (SHRIEKING):
Oh God!

THE BOY RUNS DOWNSTAIRS

DAD'S VOICE:
All done. That was one big splinter.

INT. A BACKSTREET DENTIST - DAY.

A SCRUFFY DENTIST ENTERS THE WAITING ROOM. HE IS WEARING A WHITE, BLOOD-SPATTERED COAT AND LOOKS STONED. THERE IS ONLY ONE PATIENT - A SMALL MAN IN HIS FORTIES.

DENTIST:
(gruff voice) Who's next?

PATIENT:
(timidly) Me. Is it going to hurt?

THE DENTIST SHOWS HIM A PAIR OF PLIERS.

DENTIST:
(nodding slowly) Oh, yeees. It'll be as painful as having your goolies trapped in the lift doors. Have you got the sixty quid?

PATIENT:
Yes. But aren't you going to use an anaesthetic?

DENTIST:
I injected it before you came in. Now get your wad out.

THE PATIENT HANDS OVER THE MONEY. THE DENTIST SHOVES IT IN HIS BACK POCKET AND GESTURES FOR THE PATIENT TO ENTER. THERE IS AN OLD SOFA IN THE MIDDLE OF THE ROOM, COILS STICKING OUT OF IT. THE DENTIST GESTURES TO IT.

DENTIST:
Lie down and shut up.

PATIENT:
Whatever happened to customer service?

DENTIST:
He went bust.

THE PATIENT LIES DOWN ON THE SOFA WITH HIS MOUTH OPEN. THE DENTIST STRADDLES HIM.

DENTIST:
Which one is it?

PATIENT POINTS TO A WISDOM TOOTH.

PATIENT:
This one.

THE DENTIST YANKS OUT THE TOOTH. THE PATIENT CLUTCHES HIS JAW AND RUNS OUT THE SURGERY SCREAMING. THE DENTIST GOES BACK INTO THE WAITING ROOM. HE SEES A MAN WAITING, MID-THIRTIES, TRENDILY DRESSED.

NEW PATIENT:
I need a filling. Is it going to hurt?

THE DENTIST SHOWS HIM A HAMMER AND THE PREVIOUS PATIENT'S TOOTH. HE TAPS THE TOOTH WITH THE HAMMER.

DENTIST:
(nodding slowly) Oh, yeeees. It'll be as painful as having your chookies run over by a bus.

INT. KID'S BEDROOM. DAY

A CHUBBY 14-YEAR-OLD BOY (GAVIN) IS SITTING ON HIS BED SULKING. DAD STANDS OVER HIM, GAZING DOWN QUIETLY

DAD
Don't worry, you'll get over her, Gavin.

GAVIN
Don't want to!

DAD
You're young and time's a great healer. Just accept that you'll soon forget about her.

GAVIN (pathetically)
But I can't.... I love her dad.

DAD
Nonsense, it's just puppy love.

GAVIN
So? What's wrong with puppy love?

DAD SHAKES HIS HEAD SADLY

DAD
Well, technically it's known as bestiality - and it's frowned upon in this country, son.

GAVIN SHRUGS OFF HIS FATHER'S HAND AND STARTS POUTING AGAIN.

ENDS

I'm voting for Craig H - another comical premise executed tidily.

PATIENT:
Whatever happened to customer service?

DENTIST:
He went bust.

I'm going to go for Alex for the above line - made me laugh

KASM

Few heads missing this week and one or two rushed efforts I felt?

My vote however goes to Otterfox if not for his sound effects but for the fact he wrote a f**king book.

More Smurgoon please - feels like it has that adult cartoon feel to it?

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