Yes, I agree. I had a plan for the end but couldn't get back on track due to the whole Batman thing, lol. Damn, you Batman! Whack!
What Will Will You Win?! Page 2
Quote: Leevil @ May 24 2010, 9:49 PM BSTWhat I was really after, is is the Gameshow theme 'Which Will Will You Win' was any good, or is it too distracting and messy within a sketch?
Hello Leevil 
I'm going to answer properly this time. In my opinion:
Yes, the gameshow idea of good and bad wills is great. It isn't distracting or messy at all to go with this theme for a sketch. But...
I don't think you get into the central idea early enough - there is a bit of easy-to-lose stuff before we the audience even get to know the concept of the gameshow, and until then it is "just another gameshow sketch". Cut out the early stuff.
The Batman stuff throws it off kilter, in a bad way from where I'm sitting. Write a Batman sketch if you like, but in your own words you want to know if the gameshow theme works, so stick to that as your central premise if that's the sketch you were wanting to write.
The ending doesn't work, except in an "I don't have an ending to this sketch" way.
In all honesty I think the premise is really good but it is thrown off course unnecessarily along the way by clutter it doesn't need. The idea is good enough to work on its own and if you stuck with that you could get much more out of it.
Thanks, Badge!
Yes, that's exactly what this ending was. I wanted to finish the sketch, to get it up here and ask my question. Poor way to go out it. Will take yours, and everybody's suggestions and produce something to a better standard.
*looks at Bussell*
Bussell, move out of the way. I can't see James Cotter.
This is just to random for my delictation. Good ideas but even the most surreal comedy needs some kinda point and direction to pull the audience in.
Good dialogue, visuals and ideas. But it needs structure in my view.
Are you high Lee?
I wish!