Beautiful Baby.

FX: Baby gurgling

Colin:
Ah look at him, he's so happy, ahh Daddy's little boy.

Julia:
He is the most the most beautiful baby in the world, yes you are!

Colin:
Well let's not go that far, ...he's not going to win any awards is he?

Julia:
What are you talking about, he's gorgeous.

Colin:
No he's not gorgeous! He really, really isn't! It's hardly surprising though, I mean It's basic genetics, the thing is, you & I are not very good looking people.

Julia:
Speak for yourself, I'd be well out of your league, if it wasn't for the eyebrows.

Colin:
Look we're not talking about you're bizarre eyebrows, we're discussing our ugly child, please let's have some decorum.

Julia:
I just can't believe you really think that our child is ugly, why didn't you say something before, maybe you should have said something at the hospital.

Colin:
Now you're being silly, there's nothing they could do anyway, I checked!

Julia:
Listen to me Colin! Our baby is beautiful! I have never seen a more beautiful baby and I never will. Ok!

Colin:
What about,. Dave & Sues kid.

Julia:
Well that's not fair, Dave & Sue are both really good looking.

Colin:
That little kid of theirs? It's like looking at springtime in a pram.

Julia:
You don't need to have it as your screensaver though.

Colin:
Don't worry dear, I don't think that our child is hideous

Julia:
Oh well that's a relief!

Colin:
He's definitely better looking than Barrys youngest.

Julia:
Which one's that?

Colin:
The one there, in the field trip photo.

Julia:
Nonsense! That's a lovely little thing, all dressed up in pink.

Colin:
No not that baby, that one over there.

Julia:
That's not a baby!

Colin:
It is, I promise you.

Julia:
My God what have they done to it?

Colin:
Don't look at it directly, it's bad luck.

Julia:
So all you're saying is that Thomas is better looking than that thing.

Colin:
Don't call it a thing darling that's rude, It's just an innocent, hideous looking Baby.

Julia:
So you're saying that our child is ugly, but at least he's slightly better looking than that... atrocity of an offspring.

Colin:
In a nutshell yes! But because he's ours I'm probably a bit biased.

END

It's a nice idea and plays well but it's a bit to true to life. I could imagine lots of families having this conversation. Maybe give it a harsher edge?

Good, and an excellent pay off, but I would look to see if you could trim it down a little. Not sure where, but it just did not feel it quite warranted the length.

I think it's really funny

The dialogue is a bit unnatural, but there are some good lines in it. Could do with being more pacey. But as an idea it's not too bad.

Cheers all.

Quote: Leevil @ May 21 2010, 1:10 AM BST

The dialogue is a bit unnatural, but there are some good lines in it. Could do with being more pacey. But as an idea it's not too bad.

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I knwo what you mean.
It was a rewrite & I think the dialogue lost teh little bit of realism it had along the way.

But saying that, most of the radio sketches I've heard are unnatural. In a kind of we're-obviously-a-comedy-c-listen-to-the-odd-tone-in-our-voice. Of course not all are like this, but there is definitely an annoying pattern being played out somewhere.

Quote: Steve Sunshine @ May 20 2010, 9:41 PM BST

FX: Colin:
That little kid of theirs? It's like looking at springtime in a pram.

Julia:
You don't need to have it as your screensaver though.

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There are some very good lines, such as the above, but it feels like a sketch I've heard a lot before. I can't tell you where, but it seems a very familiar idea.

Agree with what someone else said , about the dialogue needing a once over too.

Love it Steve. Thought it flowed really well and the characters were brill. I liked the pay off and screensaver lines best.

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