Skit comp entry

Let the slaggath begin! Feedback appreciated

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VISUAL - A DOOR WITH "INTERVIEW ROOM"

INTERVIEWER
So Mr. Jones, tell me, where do you see yourself, say, 5 years from now?

CUT AWAY : WE SEE A FERRARI SPEEDING DOWN VEGAS, GIRLS IN BIKINIS HANGING OUT OF IT AND A HAND THROWING CASH OUT OF THE WINDOWS AT PASSERS BY.

INTERVIEWER (trying to get Mr. Jones' attention)
Mr. Jones...

WE NOW SEE MR JONES IS ABOUT 100 YEARS OLD WITH NO TEETH AND IS LAUGHING LOUDLY

CAPTION "THATS AMBITIOUS"

FADE TO - THE ENGLAND TEAM LIFTING THE WORLD CUP :-)

CAPTION "AND THAT....ISN'T GONNAE HAPPEN"

Hi Craig,

Just had a quick read and I liked the idea of the old man having this wild vision of his life but I think there is a flaw to the logic.
Would a 100 year be going for an interview? The World Cup doesn't seem to fit with the rest of it either.
Would it work better with a child being asked by career guidance councillor?

Good use of the lesser known rule of two.
To me it seems more part of a cartoony scene than a fully rounded quickie.
With a tweak it might make quite a nice runner, but at the moment it's not really doing it for me.

I agree with the lesser known rule of two - BUT if you divide this by an apple and then think of the first number that comes into your garden, you are probably ready for the prescribed treatment.

Hey guys,

Thanks for the feedback.

I saw it more as an advert - mainly one for us Scots who aren't even in the world cup.

Angie..is there EVER any logic in my sketches?

I agree with the notion if the reveal in terms of simplicity and budget, i.e start with the interviewer asking the question pulling back to reveal he is asking it of a very old, and bemused man. It can then become a runner using Angie's suggestion for example and I am sure there are a lot more such reveals.
Funny mind!