Indian

Indian- Sketch

INT. LOUNGE OF HOUSE. DAY.

WE ARE IN THE LOUNGE OF AN AVERAGE SUBURBAN FAMILY. FATHER, SON AND DAUGHTER ARE WATCHING TV.

Mum
(O.O.V) Hello. I’m home.

Father, son and daughter
Hello

MUM ENTERS

Mum
Hey, how about an Indian?

All
Yeah…great!

CUT TO MUM OUTSIDE IN THE STREET SPEAKING TO A NORTH AMERICAN INDIAN IN FULL DRESS.

Mum
Would you like to join myself and my family for a meal this evening ?

Indian
Yeah okay. Me bring wine?

Mum
Yes okay

CUT TO LOUNGE WITH ALL FAMILY ASSEMBLED. THE INDIAN IS SEATED IN THE MIDDLE OF THE FAMILY WHO ARE SEATED ON A SOFA AND TWO ARMCHAIRS. THERE IS SILENCE.

Son (To daughter)
The Chief here is not very talkative.

Daughter
He’s worse than the Chinese we had yesterday.

CUT TO CHINESE MANDARIN SITTING ON A SMALL WOODEN CHAIR IN THE CORNER. THE MANDARIN NODS OBLIGINGLY.

Father
Yeah but not as bad as her Shepherd’s pie.

POINTS TO A SHEEP BAAING WITH SHEPHERD IN ANOTHER CORNER.

Shepherd
Arternoon.

Son and daughter
True.

I like the Shepherd at the end.

I don't want to keep telling you how to write your scripts, but I do really want to offer constructive criticism. I'm in that type of mood tonight. Here's my two cents anyway.

The Dad should enter the house and be greeted by the family and the Mum should say, "I couldn't be bothered to cook, so I just got us an Indian tonight." Then walk into the kitchen and reveal the Indian.

After reading some of your scripts, I feel you forget about the visual timing and concentrate on the dialog with visuals attached.

Now I'm no expert(never has a truer sentence been spoken) but all the advice I get is, "Remember this is a visual medium."

It also felt a bit like an old 70's sketch, I could almost smell the face paint of a white guy blacked up.

But still at the end of the day it's a play on words and I like that.