Script dialogue

What is the best way to switch from (Whispering) back to normal level in the same line of script/sketch dialogue?

Thanks.

SALLY
(WHiSPERING TO MANDY) She's got really big feet.

JANE APPROACHES

SALLY
Oh hello Jane, we were just talking about you.

Quote: Marc P @ April 28 2010, 2:52 PM BST

SALLY
(WHiSPERING TO MANDY) She's got really big feet.

JANE APPROACHES

SALLY
Oh hello Jane, we were just talking about you.

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How is the Hard Evidence TV adaptation going? I'm pleased you're keeping the "Jane's got big feet" stuff in.

Cheers Chip. One of the scripts has been written, I've been diverted on another project for a bit.

I'm more interested in the size of Jane's tits. Why did you go for her feet? Do you hava footish fetish? Or is this a Scottish Sketchish?

I forgot to say thanks for the advice, Marc P.
But what if I want to switch back to normal speech level in the same line?

Quote: Marooned @ May 11 2010, 10:51 PM BST

I forgot to say thanks for the advice, Marc P.
But what if I want to switch back to normal speech level in the same line?

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Give us the line and I'll show you what I would do. Usually breaking it with a stage direction is best.

I have a question.

If you have a character who isn't recognised - ie not seen in a long time - how would you show it?

SCRUFF :
Excuse me.

SUE :
Sorry - I've got no change.

SCRUFF :
No - it's me Tommy.

Or should I put Tommy by his dialogue?

ie

SCRUFF/TOMMY

I want it obvious that she doesn't recognise him.

Or should I write in brackets -

SUE (OBVIOUSLY NOT RECOGNISING HIM):
Sorry - I've got no change.

Sue [Doesn't recognise him]

Yes I suppose so BB. Thanks. Or

TOMMY (UNRECOGNISABLE)

Quote: Chappers @ July 20 2010, 10:34 PM BST

I have a question.

If you have a character who isn't recognised - ie not seen in a long time - how would you show it?

SCRUFF :
Excuse me.

SUE :
Sorry - I've got no change.

SCRUFF :
No - it's me Tommy.

Or should I put Tommy by his dialogue?

ie

SCRUFF/TOMMY

I want it obvious that she doesn't recognise him.

Or should I write in brackets -

SUE (OBVIOUSLY NOT RECOGNISING HIM):
Sorry - I've got no change.

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It depends on what you want your character to be called in your script, 'Scruff' or 'Tommy'. From this extract, I'd guess your character's called Tommy, so that's all he should ever be referred to within the entire script. But Sue's last line is more-or-less correct. So your example should read: (IMHO)

TOMMY :
Excuse me.

SUE :
(Not recognizing him) Sorry - I've got no change.

TOMMY :
No - it's me, Tommy.