Quote: The Giggle-o @ April 20 2010, 2:51 PM BST
Nice 
Quickie - Bound & Gagged Page 3
It was all worth it David
Quote: The Giggle-o @ April 20 2010, 2:51 PM BST
Good job!
Time to take a breather on this 'un. I'm putting this one down to the hot weather and both of you sat in stuffy airports due to cancelled flights?
The only comment I'd make is we've all taken other posters' suggested jokes and amendments onboard and incorporating them into the finished article.
What about if the pay off to the sketch was along the lines that the man in the chair isn't in fact the Girls father, as we assume, if you don't have her calling him dad, but one of her mates in the group behind's dad, possibly her boyfriend? Giving it a bit of a three act structure, This is more Chip's area really.
Quote: Marc P @ April 24 2010, 4:43 PM BSTThis is more Chip's area really.
The three-act structure or familiarity with the scenario? 
Well more the scenario was what I was hinting at! 
I thought much the same as Mr P's idea: not sure if it works any better but hey ho!
A TEENAGE GIRL (CHELSEA), SCHOOLBAG ON BACK, IS OPENING THE DOOR TO HER HOUSE. AS SHE ENTERS WE SEE A MAN IN HIS MID FIFTIES IN THE NUDE - HE IS TIED UP, HANDCUFFED TO A CHAIR AND GAGGED WITH DUCT TAPE.
CHELSEA
O - M - G, What's happened?
CHELSEA RUSHES OVER. AS SHE UNTIES AND UNGAGS HIM WE HEAR A WHIPPING NOISE.
MUM (OOV)
Someone's been a very, very naughty boy!
THEY LOOK AND SEE CHELSEA'S MUM ON THE STAIRCASE IN A MAIDS OUTFIT, HOLDING A WHIP.
CHELSEA
Oh, thank God.
CHELSEA REAPPLIES THE TAPE AND AFFIXES THE HANDCUFFS.
CHELSEA
I'll be in my room. Let's go guys.
A LARGE GROUP OF TEENAGERS WALK THROUGH THE DOOR, UN BEMUSED BY THE ONGOINGS. EACH ONE GREETING THEM BOTH.
MUM (TO CHELSEA)
I've not done any tea; your Dad's ordering a Take-away later.
CHELSEA
Where is Dad by the way?
MUM
Oh he'll be in his element at Fat Brenda's by now... no, that's Thursdays; it'll be our Sandra's tonight.
CHELSEA
Oh okay.
JUST AS CHELSEA EXITS ONE OF HER FRIENDS POPS HER HEAD BACK ROUND THE DOOR.
FRIEND (TO MAN)
Dad, Mum said to tell you not to over do it and no later than ten 'cos Benny and Bernie are coming round for half past.
MAN (mumbling under the tape)
MmHmm..