Quick PM Jibe

I was listening to Gordon Brown being grilled on Radio 4 this morning over the mounting UK debt and it gave me this idea. Apologies if it has been done to death already!

INT. DOWNING ST OFFICE. DAY.

GORDON BROWN IS SITTING AT HIS DESK; A RED TELEPHONE IS CLOSE. AN ADVISOR STANDS CLOSE BY.

GORDON:
We are 17 billion pounds in debt, I must make the call!

ADVISOR:
Think carefully Mr Brown. Is it really the right decision?

GORDON:
We have failed at raising taxes, we have failed at gathering support; there is no other choice!

THE ADVISOR DIALS A NUMBER AND HANDS THE PHONE TO THE PM. WE HEAR IT RING BRIEFLY BEFORE IT IS ANSWERED BY A YOUNG BUBBLY WOMAN.

WOMEN (O.O.V)
Hello, Ocean Finance...

Def.

Ooh too much telegraphing, sorry.

Looking at it afresh I see what you mean. That is my inexperience at sketch writing showing through. How would you alter it or restructure it so that it worked?

Def.

I'd just do it as a straight copy of Ocean Finance, but change the characters to Darling and Brown.

Hmmm, so do you think it would work better if say Brown and Darling were sitting on a cheap sofa in a council type living room and giving it the monologues like the adverts such as (and for example here I cut it to just the basic joke):

BROWN:
I was set to lose my job in the next month and needed money fast.

Darling:
We needed 17 billion pounds to plug the whole in our economy but no one would lend us the money.

BROWN AND DARLING:
So we called 'Ocean Finance'

So this way you ham up the the idea of these finance companies from the start?

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Yes that sort of thing with the punch being they;re so hopeless even Ocean won't support them.

Or just before they call Ocean Finance, the phone rings. It's Ocean Finance asking Brown to bail them out.

Aah sweet go with Slagg's much better. They could have an argument over who's bailing who out.