Gavin
Saturday 12th May 2007 10:03pm [Edited]
22,778 posts
I thought what we should do is wind the sub plot up and let it run parrallel to the main story,
I sorta took a liberty with the work you guys did before because I wanted Jeremy to end up with nothing at the end and have to do something desperate to get back on top.
Also are we going with the notion that Dev and Cat bend the rules to get the last soul so they trick the producer into hearing his wife singing as being really bad, when in fact she isn't. However the plan don't work cos he says he has now fallen in love with her (he was marrying her for the wealth and fortune he thought she'd bring him) and he don't care she can't sing and is poor. All seems lost for Ct and Dev when Chris accidentally kills the wife!
It would be most intouch with character if it was Chris who undid Jeremy's bewitchment and make Jeremy realise the truth then he becomes a better human being because he's not just in love with her because she's got a good voice and looks like she'd melt the ice caps but because...uhhh, someone else can do that bit I am emotionally retarded. Any way Chris convices him to love her for her Jeremy agrees then she dies and the plan that started right at the beginning comes to fruition right at the end.
I just loved the visual of the rolling ambulance lights with jeremy crying over his dead wife and Cat and Dev approaching with an offer.
I do like the cliff hanger idea but I think in this case this ending is better, if you want write the alternative and we can compare though I am open to suggestions.