Quote: Marc P @ February 17 2010, 1:36 PM GMTIt makes it not a monologue is the problem James.
Well this is more of a extended sketch in a monologue style rather then a pure monologue.
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Quote: James Cotter @ February 17 2010, 1:42 PM GMTWell this is more of a extended sketch in a monologue style rather then a pure monologue.
So are you going to be sending it to sketch companies when you say your aim is to send it in to producers?
Quote: Marc P @ February 17 2010, 1:47 PM GMTSo are you going to be sending it to sketch companies when you say your aim is to send it in to producers?
Well I've got a ton of ideas for him some being more of the sitcom variety. My plan was to build him up in a few of these radio sketches a little bit like the way Rab C. Nesbit was created on Naked Radio. But I'm open to suggestions really, I haven't got a firm idea of yet.
Wel lI would do it as a proper monologue first if I were you. It's easier for one thing.
I really enjoyed it.
But why have you made the character Welsh? If the accent isn't spot-on, the entire piece loses all credibility and collapses.
Keep things simple, use your natural accent.
Quote: don rushmore @ February 17 2010, 5:45 PM GMTI really enjoyed it.
But why have you made the character Welsh? If the accent isn't spot-on, the entire piece loses all credibility and collapses.
I'm pleased you enjoyed it.
As soon as I read the dialogue back I began to act it out in a Welsh accent. It fits him somehow. I can't image it being any different. It also has a lot to do with his angst with the world, he's a Tory but lives on a council estate in Wales, it's sort of a contradiction which makes for interest inner turmoil for the character and because I can do a Welsh accent.
Quote: don rushmore @ February 17 2010, 5:45 PM GMTKeep things simple, use your natural accent.
Virtually did that with Jeremy Spicer and I've done my own voice in a short film with my fifth character Peter Wilton so it's time for a change and plus I am meant to be a character comedian who is versatile.
Well, good luck with it!
Is this the main thing you're working on at the moment?
Quote: don rushmore @ February 17 2010, 6:09 PM GMTWell, good luck with it!
Is this the main thing you're working on at the moment?
Thanks.
It's becoming more of a priory alongside a new episode of Back to Class and producing my thirty minute monologue A Matter of Principle.
James, do you work, or are you still a student type?
Quote: bigfella @ February 17 2010, 7:25 PM GMTJames, do you work, or are you still a student type?
I'm still a student type.
Quote: Marc P @ February 17 2010, 2:20 PM GMTWell I would do it as a proper monologue first if I were you. It's easier for one thing.
I've been wanting to more radio comedy with noises off for years and I've got all the F/X set up so I'm going to do like that I think. I could make two version though, one pure monologue and the other radio. I think that's a fair compromise.
The trouble with noises off in James is you can go anywhere and be anywhere in radio, there are no budget constraints as there are in film and TV. So.... if your drama is going to be set in just one room with one person, people shouting from off is going to sound a bit of a cheat. Monologue is all about the character 'telling a story' - it's the exception to the show don't tell rule. Think Ancient Mariner - your character should hold your audience with his voice and his unfolding narrative. Extraneous stuff breaks the spell.
But hey do it both ways and see what you like, I understand you have your own radio production company now anyway. 
Quote: Marc P @ February 18 2010, 12:51 PM GMTThe trouble with noises off in James is you can go anywhere and be anywhere in radio, there are no budget constraints as there are in film and TV. So.... if your drama is going to be set in just one room with one person, people shouting from off is going to sound a bit of a cheat. Monologue is all about the character 'telling a story' - it's the exception to the show don't tell rule. Think Ancient Mariner - your character should hold your audience with his voice and his unfolding narrative. Extraneous stuff breaks the spell.
But hey do it both ways and see what you like, I understand you have your own radio production company now anyway.
I understand what your saying and I will do two version and see which one I prefer after I record them both.
The production company thing is just something I set up as freelance thing it's not a proper production company it's just so I can keep my audio/radio projects as there own thing. I want to make a lot more radio comedy now I have access to a studio.
Quote: James Cotter @ February 18 2010, 1:06 PM GMTI understand what your saying and I will do two version and see which one I prefer after I record them both.
The production company thing is just something I set up as freelance thing it's not a proper production company it's just so I can keep my audio/radio projects as there own thing. I want to make a lot more radio comedy now I have access to a studio.
Yes I think you should do both and see what you like. There's no reason not to break rules and traditional formats, but what you have here could be a really good monologue. I don't see it as a sketch and I think it could help you stat to get a proper portfolio together. As writer and performer.
Quote: Marc P @ February 18 2010, 1:13 PM GMTYes I think you should do both and see what you like. There's no reason not to break rules and traditional formats, but what you have here could be a really good monologue. I don't see it as a sketch and I think it could help you stat to get a proper portfolio together. As writer and performer.
Thanks for your help I do appreciate it and I hope this will be a success so I can write and perform more in the future.