Radio sketch

Again it's only a first draft, literally trying to get ideas down onto paper with the intention of fine tuning the better ones at a later date. Be brutal if it is required I've got thick skin.

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FX. Cheesy 'Techno' music plays. Salesman speaks over the
background music.

SALESMAN:
Have you got unwanted money lying
around, clogging up your home? Want
to know how you exchange that money
into gold?

WOMAN:
Well I do like gold.

SALESMAN:
Well what are you waiting for? With
'Gold-4-Cash' you can take all
those screwed up, dirty notes and
turn them into something really
worth having.

MAN:
With our 10th anniversary
approaching I had to get the missus
a present fast. Thanks to
'Gold-4-Cash' I was able to get the
perfect necklace, and matching
earrings. And all for just £250.

SALESMAN:
And with 'Gold-4-Cash' it's as easy
as A-B-C.

A. Arrive... at your nearest
'Gold-4-Cash' branch.

B. Browse... items on show until
you find one you are looking for.

C. Change... that excess money into
a beautiful piece of real life
gold.

FX. A cash register rings.

WOMAN 2:
Finally, I've got a ring I can be proud of.
Thanks 'Gold-4-Cash'!

SALESMAN:
It's so simple an idiot could do
it.

FX. Footsteps , followed by a bang.

WOMAN 2:
Ouch!

JEWELLER: (sighing)
You have to pull it.

Not sure it needs the last few lines
But I quite like the sketch, maybe needs a trim IMO

Yeah the ending sucks a lot but I really like the rest of it, that being the start till near the end.

You're through to the next round or summat.

Funny idea. I agree that the last few lines are surplus to requirements. Also agree that it could be trimmed up a bit in the middle or some additional gags be put in when the process is being explained via personal tesimony and step by step.