Here is my attempt for this years comedy smalls. Would be interested to know what you think.
Comedy smalls attempt
Honestly?
I think it's too long.
I'd try and cut at least 90 secs out of it - the limbering up bit could go completely.
And on first viewing I didn't get that he'd fallen in the pencil-case.
You could post-dub the commentator over the long shot and get him to tells us he's fallen in.
(Bit belt & braces, but it's pretty important we know what's happened.)
Shame about the wind - there's one bit that makes the dialogue inaudible - another contender for the cutting room floor perhaps?
In short - shorter.
Echo Lazzard re: length and need for edit, esp the warmup moment. The wind was annoying but on the plus side:
We love OtterFox' surreal take on life, immensely. Loved the "It's not a practice jump" bit.
The camera production, visual detail, is so much improved and the colours very good.
The location was to-die-for.
On a technical note: with the wind that bad maybe you could have connected the interviewer's mic to camera to get sound recorded closer to source, used a wind shield on it, and arranged the body / mic placement to give further shelter from the wind. On sections where the interviewer was providing voiceover, maybe rerecord that section indoors or in a more sheltered location and add them at the editing stage. There's no lip synch issues with those moments.
What camera are you using now?
Cheers for the advice and info guys. I take your point on it running a bit long. The wind was annoying and I don't have the greatest skills when it comes to the technical side of it.
I did like the warm up bit though. I thought it worked well with the commentry over it.
There was actually a longer version of this with another character who was interviewed by the presenter but we got rid of it.
Its good to get this advice especially the technical tips so thanks for that. Must start getting my technical hat on 