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I still think the quickie version is the best, i.e:

"WOMAN:
Okay Paul this all seems fine, tell me, what makes you particularly suited to the position of spokesman for The Big Green Shoe Company?

CUT TO REVEAL PAUL SITTING IN CHAIR. HE IS A LARGE GREEN SHOE"

At least that way, if someone doesn't like the sketch, they only have to suffer for 10 seconds!

I'm not keen on the birthmark or the 'throwing himself at the wall' but, from the original version, the dialogue:

"PAUL:
I had a trial at the Small Red Brick Shop last summer

PAUL:
They said they wanted someone less like a big green shoe"

is funny.

Rood
I think your first quickie/edited version was spot on and very funny.
I like short and sweet

Thanks very much all people. Just what I was after, especially the specific lines that work, so I know if there's anything worth keeping. I shall reward you by taking this thread of the life support machine, and letting it die naturally.

Quote: Roodeye @ November 12 2009, 5:07 PM GMT

"WOMAN:
Okay Paul this all seems fine, tell me, what makes you particularly suited to the position of spokesman for The Big Green Shoe Company?

CUT TO REVEAL PAUL SITTING IN CHAIR. HE IS A LARGE GREEN SHOE"

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Roodeye's absolutely right, the quickie is best.

Stuff like your...

PAUL:
I wear shoes. 2 at time in fact.

PAUL:
Oh yes, I've been speaking since the age of three (beat) and I'm a man.

...is not particularly funny. It's also a twist on the ancient;

MANAGER:
What experience do you have in clothing?

APPLICANT:
I've worn it all my life.

Trust Roodeye in this instance - but not with your mother, sister, daughter or money.

Quote: Morrace @ November 12 2009, 5:47 PM GMT

Roodeye's absolutely right, the quickie is best.

Stuff like your...

PAUL:
I wear shoes. 2 at time in fact.

WOMAN:
Do you have any experience as a spokesman?

PAUL:
Oh yes, I've been speaking since the age of three (beat) and I'm a man.

...is not particularly funny. It's also a twist on the ancient;

MANAGER:
What experience do you have in clothing?

APPLICANT:
I've worn it all my life.

Trust Roodeye in this instance - but not with your mother, sister, daughter or money.

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Yep, it's not my proudest moment. I'm so skint right I'd trust anyone but me with money. I'll keep an eye on my daughter though

I'm a dissenting voice here. For me the joke in the original sketch was that despite being obviously perfect the job he could not persuade the interviewer to hire him because he did not fit the profile - an absurd take on a real life situation. So for me the way to go is to get the reveal in early and milk the joke, as you did in the original, but not so much. And coming up with a better out - I would suggest, off the top of my head, the next interviewee is, say, a red sandal, and the interviewer looks at his resume and comments on how well qualified he is.

But really once you have the feedback, it is up to you decide what way to go. You know what it is about the idea that initially appealed to you, so follow your instincts. Don't trust us - we're idiots. (Though possibly you could trust me with your daughter...)

Quote: Timbo @ November 12 2009, 6:17 PM GMT

Don't trust us - we're idiots.

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Timbo, yet again gives good advice.