Can I post a full script

Hi,

I'm looking for some feedback on a full script I've written.

Sitcom style pilot episode. 30odd pages.

Can I post a link to a pdf doc online and ask for feedback?

Also, am I foolish to even consider doing this?
Is it a normal thing to post a full script and ask for feedback?

Cheers

Quote: KDancin @ October 11 2009, 6:37 AM BST

Hi,

I'm looking for some feedback on a full script I've written.

Sitcom style pilot episode. 30odd pages.

Can I post a link to a pdf doc online and ask for feedback?

Also, am I foolish to even consider doing this?
Is it a normal thing to post a full script and ask for feedback?

Cheers

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Yeah, that'd be fine. I'm sure you'd get some feedback. As long as the link to the PDF works of course! Best of luck.

Edit: welcome to the BCG!

Thanks for the reply

http://www.filefactory.com/file/a0gf08e/n/Entrepreneurs_Master_Draft_pdf

I'll try and post it somewhere else with less crap to get through before it can be downloaded.
Please don't view this as an attempt to get you guys to see adverts.

Anyway some background,

I've written a couple of fairly poor scripts recently, but this one is sort of a coming together of a few ideas.

Problems with it that I'm aware of are that
1. many bits prob not funny
2. it could be argued that it's more a collection of sketches than a sitcom, altho I imagine a standard ep would be based in the main room, and then one extra set-piece
3. some of it is quite visual
4. it's very immature

About me:
Mid 20's. I am a run of the mill worker drone - that is until more recently. I've taken some time out. Hope to get fit and do some writing courses etc. Been dying to write some comedy for years and it'd genuinely be something I'd love to do.

So yea, basically throwing this out there for some feedback.
The industry I come from I'm well used to constructive(!) feedback, so hit me hard! And thanks for anyone who actually reads the entire script.

Hello *waves*

Quote: KDancin @ October 11 2009, 7:07 AM BST

3. some of it is quite visual

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I wouldn't worry about this, unless it's for radio.

Quote: KDancin @ October 11 2009, 7:07 AM BST

Problems with it that I'm aware of are that
1. many bits prob not funny
2. it could be argued that it's more a collection of sketches than a sitcom, altho I imagine a standard ep would be based in the main room, and then one extra set-piece
3. some of it is quite visual
4. it's very immature

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Hey, I thought you wanted US to critique it?!

Are you Dancin'? ... Well I'm askin'.

I liked the 'very short CUT TO introduction' to the characters.

Like in the international footie: "JOHN TERRY - DEFENDER".

I'll read it later!

The best way to do it is to post of few sample scenes and a link to the full script if the reader wants more.

Your link doesn't take me to a pdf file.

Instead, it takes me to a web page full of frames and page cannot be displayed errors.

Shouldn't the last part of the link be Entrepreneurs_Master_Draft.pdf and not Entrepreneurs_Master_Draft_pdf ???

That link does actually work but as it's a free hosting site you need to go through various click throughs.

I've posted it

http://www.boards.ie/vbulletin/attachment.php?attachmentid=93048&d=1255307452

also.

Hope that works.