Critiquers wanted for my promo

I am writing a promo, and although it's pretty crap having to rush something this is the situation I am in, and I was wondering if any of your brilliant critquers out there would be alright with me pming you a first draft of my promo, it's a couple of pages long.
I don't want to put it up in the critique yet as I don't have the permission of my co-writer and also it is very much a first draft but I find sometimes when I am working against a clock that a bit of early critiquing helps speed up the proccess.

Go on then can't promise when I'll read it

Cheers sooty will send it in about half an hour.

you can send it to me as well Ronnie

cheers. I shall do. BTW it isn't going to be great I just want to know if it works in giving an idea of what the show is about. I will fine tune the dialogue in future drafts.

Use your previous thread, Ronnie. I know the thread content has morphed slightly but you can edit the thread title to reflect that.
https://www.comedy.co.uk/forums/thread/15152