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Proper Writing?

The debate rages on. :)

But for those that might be intersted I thought I would post a series beat document that you are provided with for an Ep of Doctors to show how it works. And as it has been on now I can.

This for the one that went out today. 'Trophy Girlfriend'

http://www.bbc.co.uk/iplayer/episode/b00mry61/Doctors_Series_11_Trophy_Girlfriend/

And has more detail than some.

SERIAL BEATS

Sue has been OK over the weekend, buoyed by Zara's comments. Her shock is also starting to wear off and she's thinking practically about money and where she's going to live. She phones up Howard and they have a fairly civilised conversation where he tells her that he's just finished moving his stuff out of the marital home and into a rented flat. However, just then Sue thinks she can hear some female giggling in the background, she puts the phone on speaker and turns the volume right up to let Simon listen in but he pleads ignorance. (Simon thinks the world of his father and totally believed him when he said that there was no-one else involved, it would take a cataclysmic event to shake his faith in his Dad). All morning, Sue is convinced that Howard has done the dirty on her and eventually she goes into The Mill to find out what Zara thinks (without Simon's knowledge). Zara hardly bothers to listen to the evidence, of course he's seeing someone else, they always are. Sue witters but Zara demands action. She suggests that they go and find Howard and catch him red handed. Sue and Zara finally track Howard down to his golf course and make their way there. Meanwhile, Simon has got wind of what's going on and he's just about to follow his Mum when Todd turns up wondering if Simon's ignoring him and whether he's been given the brush off. Simon doesn't have time to talk just now, he just rushes out the door and in his confusion, Todd tags along too. Sue and Zara are very conspicuous as they pinch a golf cart and wiz around the course trying to covertly tail Howard but its Simon and Todd chasing along after them that really cause a stir. Simon explains the situation to a sympathetic Todd as they drive along. Simon finally catches up with the girls and tries to stop them. He hates the idea of spying on his father and questions why Zara is doing this. Zara claims to like Sue and thinks she deserves more than a wet fish for a son. Zara is the first one to see the blonde, brainless bimbo with her mouth clamped onto Howard. Simon is horrified and tries to shield his Mum from the reality but Sue wastes no time dragging the tart into the sand bunker for a cat fight. Simon lays into his Dad in bitter disappointment, why did he lie to them? Howard shrugs, what can he say? He's fallen in love. Simon can't believe it, he never thought his father would let him down. Meanwhile Todd and Zara hang back at a discreet distance, though they're both watching. Then Zara, thinking Todd is cute, makes a pass. Todd can't quite believe the afternoon he's having, but politely turns her down. Simon finally takes charge of the situation, scoops up his Mum, wryly thanks Zara for her reality check and settles his Mum back in his childhood home – now conspicuously half empty. He wistfully shows Todd around his old bedroom. Its clear to both of them, Simon has taken a huge step into growing up today. Todd admits that he's ready to go back to the States but he's planning a detour to Geneva on the way, how about it? Simon wretchedly says that he's got so much on his plate, the timing's really bad and he'd really like to …. Todd interrupts, he understands – it's not going to happen is it? Todd is great about it, making Simon feel even worse. HOOK

Ruth returns to work today. It's a low key thing, she's feeling better and she's back on her meds. Heston is again paternal and attentive but subtle. He's there when she's feeling a bit fragile but otherwise he gives her plenty of space. Michelle also finds the time to welcome her back with a cup of tea and some chocolate.

Did you write that episode then?

I did.

I read the other thread - but , just to clarify, you are given this and then asked to turn it into a script?
And this as an actual commission rather than an 'audition' piece?

To not call it real writing is ridiculous.
In fact I should imagine you'd need to be pretty sharp to take this in your stride.
And anyway, if you love writing - you love writing, whatever shape it comes in.

Quote: Lazzard @ September 14 2009, 4:09 PM BST

I read the other thread - but , just to clarify, you are given this and then asked to turn it into a script?
And this as an actual commission rather than an 'audition' piece?

To not call it real writing is ridiculous.
In fact I should imagine you'd need to be pretty sharp to take this in your stride.
And anyway, if you love writing - you love writing, whatever shape it comes in.

Hi Lazzard. Yes. This is the kind of serial beats you are given after you have been commissioned.

So, what about the other strand that was in the show, about the possible date rape/knickers under the bed?

Quote: zooo @ September 14 2009, 4:16 PM BST

So, what about the other strand that was in the show, about the possible date rape/knickers under the bed?

That was just taken from my diary.

No, but seriously, you have to pitch your own original ideas which have to be accepted before you are given a commission. Or have some banked.

Heh, okay.
So you can add your own stuff that isn't mentioned in the document they send you.

Quote: zooo @ September 14 2009, 4:26 PM BST

Heh, okay.
So you can add your own stuff that isn't mentioned in the document they send you.

Indeedy, if you look at the serial beats you have to add stuff to make it work.

Before you write the first draft you do a detailed SxS breakdown to show how it will all fit together.

Ahhh. It all makes more sense now. :)

Just watched it, Marc. Nice one mate. Well written (of course).

Shouldn't the episode have been called All Men Are Filthy Conniving Bastards (Except The Gay Ones) though? (And looking at the "next time..." trailer, so should episode 92.)

You told us that there'd be a Donovan song in this one? Fair play for getting a Bob Dylan and a Cat Stevens one in though.

Liked the coincidence(?) of a Corrigan pretending to be a student at a university (Peep Show). And I was delighted the sex offender turned out to be from Runcorn. :)

Relieved when the twist came. Didn't want the Brad character to be found the guilty party (as he was slightly the better actor). Thought he had fallen foul of the classic serial rapist's mistake of pinning their victims' underwear to a board and attaching Post-It notes with their names on. ;)

Good lines exchanged towards the end about the stupidity of the guilty student's plan. :D

Overall, it confirmed what I always suspected about doctors and nurses who work in primary care. Lazy, overpaid shits who skive-off any time they feel like it because there's no actual patients to see. (The only patient in the waiting room seemed to have come in only to use the vending machine.) Instead they spend their working day swanning-off to golf courses or attempting to entrap perverts.

Oh and I see they've got a doctor (Heston?) who wears a bow tie. In my experience, doctors who wear bow ties (and this guy wears a waistcoat as well!) are invariably pompous and condascending wankers. So, well done Doctors, you've got that one right from the (brief) look I got of him.

:)

a genuinely helpful thread... well it was

cheers Marc.

Yes, this is certainly interesting. :)

Cheers guys. :)

All interesting stuff!

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