British Comedy Guide

Self abuse.

INT. BEDROOM. DAY

A TEENAGE BOY IS AT HIS PC. THE SLEEVE OF HIS SHIRT IS ROLLED UP. HE IS CLICKING INTENTLY ON IMAGES OF SCANTILY CLAD WOMEN. IN EACH IMAGE THE WOMAN HAS HER HEAD THROWN BACK, EXPOSING HER NECK.

SUDDENLY THE BOY BITES HIS OWN ARM, DRAWING BLOOD.

MOTHER (OOV)
Tommy?

THE BOY HURRIEDLY WIPES HIS MOUTH, AND STARTS PULLING DOWN HIS SLEEVE.

HIS MOTHER IS STANDING IN THE DOORWAY.

MOTHER
You'll go blind.

AS SHE TALKS WE SEE THAT THE MOTHER HAS LONG, SHARPLY POINTED, CANINE TEETH.

END.

Aaah now that is clever nice one

Nice although it took me a couple of reads to get it. Great idea though, it was the women with their heads threw to the side line that confused me initially.

Clever idea, maybe a bit too subtle (or I'm just thick)?

Ah...yes. Very good. But would agree with the others maybe a bit too subtle

Cheers guys. I have tweaked it a little to try to make it clearer to the reader.

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