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Frank 'N' Steve episode two.

Hey everyone,
Thanks as always to everyone who've watched my earlier contributions!

So, for shits and giggles, I'm adding my script to this thread so you can get an idea of how I get from page to screen, which, I thought may be interesting to some.

So, first off... The skit.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9kRmgzNZgwM

and here's the script....Catch you soon people, love as always John x =]

Int. location. house.

ANGLE ON FRANK AND STEVE.

FRANK and STEVE sit on the same SOFA.

Their focus is on the TELEVISION, A WEATHER REPORT plays.

Report voice over

Today, we can expect nothing, but, thunder and rain storms all day...

THUNDER SOUND EFFECT PLAYS. The LIGHTS switch OFF.

BLACK.

THUNDER SOUND EFFECT PLAYS.

A WOMAN screams.

The LIGHT switches back on.

STEVE is now SITTING on FRANKS lap, He looks scared.

the PAIR look at each other for an uncomfortable second.

FRANK

Er, what you doing mate?

STEVE

Nothing, just fancied a cuddle, buddy.

FRANK

Get off me (FRANK tips STEVE onto the floor and OUT of SHOT)

WHISTLE/THUD sound.

The word THUD appears on the screen.

STEVE

ow.

FRANK ponders of a moment.

FRANK

Wait up, are you scared of lighting?

STEVE gets up.

STEVE

It's complicated.

ANGLE ON FRANK.

FRANK

So is long division and I can't remember anyone ever screaming over that like a girl!

ANGLE ON FRANK AND STEVE.

STEVE

It's hardly the same thing, is it?

FRANK

I don't know, you did sound like a girl!

STEVE

No I mean...

ANGLE ON FRANK.

FRANK

(Picks up beat) I know what you meant, I'm just saying for a minute there, in the darkness, it was almost like I was sat next to a big, green screaming girl, that's all!

ANGLE ON FRANK AND STEVE.

STEVE

I didn't scream like a girl!

LIGHTING STRIKES.

BLACK.

A woman screams.

The lights come back on, STEVE once again is sitting on FRANKS lap.

The pair look at each other for another uncomfortable second.

STEVE

Your going to throw me on the floor again now, aren't you?

FRANK throws STEVE off once again.

STEVE once again plummets to the ground, sound effects as before.

END.

Interesting!

You'll hate me for this but I like the script better than the realisation! It's the voices and the timing of the voices. They are not quite right. For me, anyway. Also, the scream isn't right. I don't know whether that scream is an off the shelf sound effect or not but it doesn't sound like a girl screaming to my ears, and it needs to. The animation is ok but the voices aren't there yet for me.

But I liked the script! :)

Thanks for taking the time and effort to see both! =]

Glad you like the writing, I know I'm not a great voice artist, but, I have a good old pop at it, sometimes I hit, sometimes I miss, I guess.

Thanks for the love. =]

If I were you (..and thank the lord, I'm not sir..) No fence untendered! :)

I'd get another voice person in to help out. You do Steve, and get someone else for Frank. Just a thought. It might add a dynamic?

But if everyone else is loving your realisation, then why worry?!

Over to you.. Fx

I think you've got a pretty good voice for animation. Plenty of character and clout behind it. I think Frankie's right though and another person to bounce off of would improve it and maybe even lead to a few improvisations in recording.

Thanks for your comments guys, it is actually doing ok atm, there are definatly more cast members coming to FNS soon and new characters.

Hope your well mr shopepie, haven't seen you for a while!=]

Again thanks for watching and taking the time to expess an opinion =]

Quote: middle distance productions @ July 8 2009, 7:31 PM BST

Hope your well mr shopepie, haven't seen you for a while!

I'm good ta. Haven't been online much because of internet troubles :(

I'm looking forward to the new characters. Wolfman?

Yeah, that could happen actually, what with my recent facination with the munsters lol. =] Glad to see Mr shoepie is still around! Can't wait to see some new stuff.

Maybe, 'the project managers' workspace could be haunted by 'Gary the ghost', Rofl...

Speak to you soon mate!=]

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