Which Sitcom should I write?

I'm very good at not finishing sitcoms, as some of you already know.

So I'd like to know, for another chance at actually finishing one, which is the most popular, by vote and for a second chance at feedback from some new members, which one I should finish, basically.

Appreciations goes out to anyone who bothers to read through any of this, and even more so for any feedback. I love you all.

Comfy - http://pc.celtx.com/project/cciwjLYbsqxk/view/http://celtx.com/res/M1aZcLSOuRpS

Untitled - http://pc.celtx.com/project/Y21pLKL65v2k/view/http://celtx.com/res/hfRKwz8E1mnG

Against The Law - http://pc.celtx.com/project/2mx43K56V4Eo/view/http://celtx.com/res/dlx5Dh6LDQjX

Moving On - http://pc.celtx.com/project/f6oJwza2Ilxg/view/http%3A%2F%2Fceltx.com%2Fres%2FE9A7acYZPBJM (Alternative link) - http://pc.celtx.com/project/f6oJwza2Ilxg

Thanks again.

"Comfy" is very good. Brilliant premise. Can't see a series there, but could work well as a short film.

Lee, I look at them all ( apart from the variation)

I liked them all to degrees.

I agree with Kevin about Comfy - seems more like a giant sketch.

I liked the police one, but was confused to the blinding lights bits. Is it a supernatural sitcom? It also seemed a bit like banter with the call me Sir stuff and didn't really seem to go anywhere - but not bad by any means.

I enjoyed the last one the best - now here is a suggestion insert "comfy" into this set up? He goes to bed because his girlfriend left him?

?????

So my vote goes to the last one.

I think you should finish the one you want to finish

I had a very, very quick skim through them all, definitely some funny lines that made me laugh but no real stand out characters or plots that hooked me to be honest. All the characters just seem to be a bit confused about where they are and what Tea they're drinking.

I'd probably go for the Policeman one as it has the best set-up and the characters were the most memorable.

Good luck, you've got further than me (4 times) at writing a sitcom.

Cheers guys for checking them out and for feedback.

Bigfella - I love your idea with combing the two, that's excellent! The police one, I imagined it to not really follow the laws of the universe, I don't mean anything supernatural will necessarily happen, but cartoon style action would be a big part of it. Not quite the Young Ones, but that might give you an idea?

Also, the blinding lights are meant to represent his almost God-like appearance, the type of lights that follow Jesus around.

Also, also, the second "Untitled' one is a completely different episode, with the same characters (is what I meant to say) It's not a variation on the same comfy episode.

Thanks again for reading n replying

Shoepie!

You make a good first point, but the problem is I can't decide, this will help give me a little push, in the right direction, hopefully.

Thanks for the vote, and I think it's about 8 sitcoms, all unfinished

They all have merits but you must concentrate on the one [or combination] you regard as having the most mileage.

Now my arse hurts from sitting on the fence.

Quote: Geoff Mutton @ July 2 2009, 6:19 PM BST

Now my arse hurts from sitting on the fence.

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I've installed an arm chair and mini fridge, you can join me if you want?

Thanks

Quote: Leevil @ July 2 2009, 6:21 PM BST

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I notice I'm not invited - are you scared I'll break it!

Re the Police one, it seem's an odd set up to me to have that "young ones" type feel. I'd play that one straight. But that's just me.

I'm just not interested in doing a "straight" comedy at the moment. I want to use my youth and energy (HAH!) to express all types of comedy and farce.

I want a sitcom with a faster pace than what is/was fashionable in the past few years. Basically trying to remove any trace of Mockumentry/whateverness and return to something that is both traditional and familiar but fresh and exciting. (God, that sounds awfully like marketing speak)

A Farce is always good.

If you can get it as pacy as Not Going Out with a similar gag ratio, you're on to a winner.

Shall I bring a parasol to the fence?

Yes, but be careful of the microwave, I don't know why? I just wanted to mention I have installed a microwave.

Lee, write the one that you think you will enjoy writing the most, otherwise you will have no chance of finishing it. And when you've finished it sit back proudly and put it away for a bit.

I liked 'untitled' and 'law' the most.

Ha ha. In agreement with other people that Comfy should just be a sketch. It did make me smile.

I actually preferred Moving On, but I think you should change the name of Lee, as I kept seeing him as Lee Mack for some reason.

Oh, and those flashbacks should be marked (FLASHBACK) in the sluglines so that the reader doesn't get confused.