Man On The Moon

Gordon Brown is in floods of tears with Peter Mandleson.

Gordon: Oh Peter. These last two weeks have been the worst of my life.

Peter: It's been pretty rough Prime Minister.

Gordon: Rough? It's been like wiping my backside with sandpaper.

Peter: Things are on the up now.

Gordon: The polls aren't are they? The latest ones report that people think that Katie Price would do I better job than me.

Peter: Just you wait – things will all come good by election day.

Gordon: How? Are you planning on doing an Ahmadinejad?

Peter: Don't be stupid Gordon, I couldn't even pronounce it. No, I'm going to make you a hero.

Gordon: What? Send me to Afghanistan and have me fight alongside our brave troops.

Peter: Well that's what most of the party would like. But I don't think that's really you.

Gordon: So what am I going to do? Rescue a fluffy kitten from the branches of a tall tree?

Peter: No, Nick Clegg's doing that on Friday.

Gordon: So what am I doing then?

Peter: You Gordon are going to be the first Prime Minister to go to the Moon.

Gordon: That's a bit ambitious Peter.

Peter: Rubbish. If the American's could do it forty years ago, it should be no problem now. I've a crack team on the case, full TV coverage the works.

Gordon: I like it, one small step.......

FX – TOP GEAR MUSIC

Clarkson : Hello and welcome to a Top Gear Special, today we're going to attempt to send Gordon Brown to the moon in our modified Fiat Punto Space Orbiter.

Gordon: (Fx – Radio Type Echo) Umm, Peter I'm not so sure this is a good idea.....They seem to have put my head in Goldfish bowl....Hello....Peter.....Peter?...Is Anyone there?

Clarkson : And then later on in the show we'll be putting a Star in our reasonably priced car<BEAT> The new Prime Minister, Peter Mandleson.

No good folks?

I liked it.

It left me confused to be honest, bigfella. It seems the sketch doesn't really start until towards the end.

I might be completely wrong, but I'd start with:

Gordon: So what am I going to do? Rescue a fluffy kitten from the branches of a tall tree?

Peter: No, Nick Clegg's doing that on Friday.

Gordon: So what am I doing then?

Peter: You Gordon are going to be the first Prime Minister to go to the Moon.

and fill in some back story in way to the end

Thanks Bill.

Thanks for reading Rick but you've gone and confused me now. I thought it was quite a straight forward one. You've confused me with your starting point? Why start there? If we do that We don't get Mandy's scheme that he wants to make Gordie a hero to win the election.

True - but you can put that in as back story as the funny bit is the moon thing, so I'd get to it as soon as possible, and talk about the 'why' once you've given the 'what'.

The first half of the sketch doesn't do a great deal - but the idea is good.

No problem if you don't agree - as I say, I could be miles off the mark

No. I just didn't get what you were getting at. You're saying the first half isn't really funny.

I think there are some nice topical gags there, but could benifit from a little trim I guess.

It's your sketch chief - just trying to be constructive

Got to agree with rick that the sketch seems to take a long time to decide where it is going, and though there are some smiles along the way, the destination does not do a lot for me. It might work better if you could build in some topicality around the moon angle - perhaps reference NASA's announcement about sending up an unmanned probe.

Quote: Rick Allden @ June 22 2009, 8:19 PM BST

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And indeed you were.

It needs a trim.

Quote: Timbo @ June 22 2009, 8:25 PM BST

Got to agree with rick that the sketch seems to take a long time to decide where it is going, and though there are some smiles along the way, the destination does not do a lot for me. It might work better if you could build in some topicality around the moon angle - perhaps reference NASA's announcement about sending up an unmanned probe.

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I was trying to link it in to the 40th Annerviesery ( Christ spelling!) on the Moon landings _ I did it after watching clips of the James May programme.

It needs a chopping down at the start and get into the moon thing quick like Rick says.