This is my first sketch: Thanks for any thoughts:
A POSTMAN PUTS SOME LETTERS IN THROUGH A LETTERBOX.
A MAN IS STANDING GOING THROUGH THEM.
MAN:
Bloody brown envelopes. Let's see what we've got.
HE LOOKS AT EACH ENVELOPE INDIVIDUALLY.
MAN:
Okay, bills, bills, bills again, more bills. Oh, look at this one, nope bills, bills, bills.
THERE IS A LOAD OF BROWN ENVELOPES ON THE FLOOR.
ANOTHER MAN APPEARS.
FIRST MAN:
You're a popular guy Bill.
This is a very old joke. I first heard it on Cheers.
The primary theme of Peagoot's sketch featuring post-postal delivery is the defining characteristic of modern non-hilarity; and cannot be compared to the genre of post-cultural comedy featuring postmen. The premise of such carefully constructed dialogue such as; "Okay, bills, bills, bills again, more bills", demonstrates that the line came from the 'creative' side of the writer's brain which had clearly malfunctioned - resulting in in a definite 'non-lol'. It could be said that if neo-dialectic narrative within the context of the afore-mentioned dialogue holds; we have to choose between the sub-textual paradigm of context and relative power relations which may, or may not be found within the confines of a brown envelope.
And not a Reader's Digest envelope in sight.
Quote: Morrace @ May 29 2009, 4:21 PM BSTThe primary theme of Peagoot's sketch featuring post-postal delivery is the defining characteristic of modern non-hilarity; and cannot be compared to the genre of post-cultural comedy featuring postmen. The premise of such carefully constructed dialogue such as; "Okay, bills, bills, bills again, more bills", demonstrates that the line came from the 'creative' side of the writer's brain which had clearly malfunctioned - resulting in in a definite 'non-lol'. It could be said that if neo-dialectic narrative within the context of the afore-mentioned dialogue holds; we have to choose between the sub-textual paradigm of context and relative power relations which may, or may not be found within the confines of a brown envelope.
Peagoot meet Morrace!
Enjoy!
Indeed Big Fella.
I feel this sketch could only work with an ironic 'wah wah wahhhh' after it - the kind of sound effect you used to get when Terry (of Terry and June fame) fell into a pond or something.
I do sometimes wish I was around much earlier though, when we could have been making these jokes for the first time! That's what Marty Mcfly should have done - never mind nicking all the songs of the future!
Peagoot first of all welcome to the forum.
Second, yes a bit of an old joke but not bad for a first try everything seems in order in every other way! (which helps).