Hen Party

INT. Night.

A Group of girls are having a Hen Party. They are dancing to music and drinking in the lounge, it's late at night. All of them are in high spirits and are worse for wear.

Loud music is coming from the house. All of the girls are laughing and giggling. There is a loud knock on the door.

The bride to be opens the door. A man dressed as a Policeman is standing there.

BRIDE: Wooooooooooo, ahhhhhhhh, oh my God!

A group of girls gather behind her, they all scream in excitement. They pull him in by his shirt, and drag him into lounge.

BRIDE: Ahhhh...who ordered him! who set this up?

Music is still loud.

GIRL1: Ahhh dunno hahaha!

GIRL2!: Get your kit off! off! off! off!

Policeman looks arkward and shy.

All girls laugh.

POLICEMAN: YOUR..

GIRLS: What?

BRIDE: Off! off! off!

GIRL1: STRIP! Strip! strip!

POLICEMAN: YOUR...

Girls continue to giggle and laugh.

BRIDE: What?..(laughing)

POLICEMAN: YOUR..

GIRLS: Off! off! off!

Policeman loses his temper and shouts at the top of his voice.

POLICEMAN: YOUR FIANCE IS DEAD!

Music goes dead. Girls look on in shock.

POLICEMAN: Your fiance's dead. killed in a car crash on the A46, about an hour ago,tried to, tried to say..but..y'know..(points his hat in direction of rowdy girls)

SILENCE.

Nice Scottidog.

I enjoyed it myself actually, cheers Nige

good one but you don't need the last line

I do. My sketch my rules misses

arrogant little sh*t, it's the rules of comedy

Ok ok. sorry

But imagine the last line, as the officer saying it in a very arkward manner, a bit 'David Brent' esk?

Liked it

Or maybe:

GIRLS: Off! off! off!

Policeman loses his temper and shouts at the top of his voice.

POLICEMAN: YOUR FIANCE IS DEAD!

Music goes dead. Girls look on in shock. (PAUSE) Then at each other. music kicks back in. Girls giggle and laugh.

GIRLS: Off! off! off!

Or maybe not!

Reminds me of The Fast Show sketch with Ted & Ralph.

I haven't seen that, Nil? do you have a back catalogue of every comedy and comedy scene in your memory? You've done that a couple of times.

Erm...no 'Random'that's just sick! where is your heart? haha

Quote: Scottidog @ April 30 2009, 8:55 PM BST

I haven't seen that, Nil? do you have a back catalogue of every comedy and comedy scene in your memory? You've done that a couple of times.

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Yes, yes I do.

I'm sure you know the one. It's not exactly the same, this just reminded me of it. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zGBTrCZObyA

Quote: Scottidog @ April 30 2009, 8:32 PM BST

Ok ok. sorry

But imagine the last line, as the officer saying it in a very arkward manner, a bit 'David Brent' esk?

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you get a big laugh on...your fiance's dead...it's milking it after that and the line may not be heard over the laughter, so it's superfluous, but as you said it's your sketch

i see what you mean, great sketch. I like the fast show one too

Your memory is brilliant though!

Quote: Scottidog @ April 30 2009, 9:04 PM BST

Your memory is brilliant though!

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It's really not.

Quote: bushbaby @ April 30 2009, 9:02 PM BST

you get a big laugh on...your fiance's dead...it's milking it after that and the line may not be heard over the laughter, so it's superfluous, but as you said it's your sketch

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I don't want any laughter. Just tears. You know like those annoying people when they laugh they make no sound what so ever? as for 'superfluff' is that the name of your dog?