Another attempt at a topical sketch for NR. I hope you likes.
http://www.shoepie.co.uk/archive/gordon-showing-emotions-bsg.pdf
It's (as always) missing a proper ending.
Another attempt at a topical sketch for NR. I hope you likes.
http://www.shoepie.co.uk/archive/gordon-showing-emotions-bsg.pdf
It's (as always) missing a proper ending.
I'd stop at the second sexiest man alive but overall good sketch man
I liked it as is. Good one.
Finish it at the line where Darling can't think of any good news, and send it to T/S
Thanks everyone.
Quote: Gavin @ April 26 2009, 10:23 AM BSTI'd stop at the second sexiest man alive but overall good sketch man
Cheers Buddy. Yeah as a TV/Radio sketch I'd definitely stop there and cut to the next one. I've never seen a live sketch show before though so I'm not sure how a low key finish like that would go down so I just made him shout a bit at the audience.
I'm hoping to see Treason show when they're in Bath so hopefully I'll have a better understanding of it all then.
Yeah goes on a bit...Where's the animations I'm a needing a beano fix sniff!!!
Quote: LIME5000 @ April 26 2009, 6:15 PM BSTYeah goes on a bit...Where's the animations I'm a needing a beano fix sniff!!!
Thanks. I'll leave it a few days and then try and cut some lines. 4 pages should have set off a warning alarm!
No animations for a while, my PC is broke :-( Might have a couple of different things coming out end of May. One of them is going to be voiced by a couple of BSG forum favourites. I'll keep their identities a secret for now but I'm looking forward to it!
Really solid sketch. It actually raised a chuckle out of me which is rare on this site. Good work
Hey ShoePie
I like it - I enjoyed the ending - "in your face Clooney!". Agree it could be shortened near the end though.
The Hannah Montana bit possibly needs to go somewhere else in a second line or be replaced by something he would be excited about. It didn't quite work for me here - otherwise it's great.
ps I may have an animation idea I need your help with...
Jx
Quote: Jane P @ April 26 2009, 9:32 PM BSTps I may have an animation idea I need your help with...
Jx
Thanks Jane. Drop me an email re: animation.
It read well, liked the Clooney ending also.
This is an ingenious bit of character comedy and gets top points from me for being something I can really visualise.
3 pages is a little ambitious for NR. And the dialogue is strong enough you don't really need to describe how they say their lines.
But top stuff I think someone could really ahve fun acting in this.