Spare change

Haven't posted for a while. This is just a quickie. Probably impossible to film but there you go.

EXT. STREET IN TOWN. DAY

A HOMELESS HIPPY IS SITTING AT THE SIDE OF THE ROAD WITH A DOG ON A BIT OF STRING. HE CALLS TO A WELL DRESSED MAN STANDING NEAR.

HIPPY
Excuse me mate. Have you got any spare change?

MAN
Yeah sure. Hang on.

MAN CALLS OUT OF SHOT AND WHISTLES TO SOME-ONE OUT OF SHOT.

MAN
Come on Terry. Back ‘er up mate.

MAN MAKES BECKONING GESTURES AS IF GUIDING A REVERSING VEHICLE

F/X WE HEAR THE REVERSING WARNING OF A VEHICLE

A DUMPER TRUCK COMES INTO VIEW AND DUMPS A SHED LOAD OF PENNIES ON TO THE PATH BY HIPPY.

MAN
There you go.

Hehe -- like it. Short and straight to the point.

Evokes memories of your bacon and herring sketches

Dan

lol I can imagine the homeless bum's Hand stretched out of a mountain of Pennies good imagery Liked it alot

Absurdly funny.

Doesn't it need a bit more reason to it? I mean, otherwise it could be done with anything:

MAN GOES BACK TO COFFEE COUNTER

MAN: Sorry, I forgot, do you have any napkins?

WOMAN BEHIND COUNTER: Yeah hold on

WOMAN BECKONS A TRUCK TO COME AND DUMP A LOAD OF NAPKINS ON THE MAN

Do you know what I mean?

That could be a good thing Tom. I like it.

lol Tom that was quite funny.

a couple sat round huge table all imaculately dressed very prim and proper. Deathly silent

Man
Could you pass the salt?

A dumper truck drowns him in salt.

LOL

It could be with anything sure - so could lots of gags. But it works and it's funny.

I agree...a series of sketches could be easily formed here.

Thanks for the feedback

No, that's not a good thing. It means there's nothing smart about it or anything. If it can just be done with anything there's no point. It's just tipping a lot of what someone has asked for on top of them.

-Do you have any <enter object here>

-Yes

-<pour a load of above object onto person>

It just seems pretty juvenile to me.

-Do you have any constructive criticism

-Yes

-Pour a load of shit onto sketch

I thought it was a good sketch imho

Just read through it again made me smile again lol

Thank you for all those who liked it and for those who didn't, thanks for the constructive feedback. And for those who poured shit on it. Where did you get so much shit from? You must hire contractors!

But thanks anyway.

What's got to Tom PK? I thought it was good - just cos it COULD have been anything doesn't make it bad.