The Interrogation

INT. INTERROGATION ROOM - DAY

PRISONER'S POINT-OF-VIEW. TWO INTERROGATORS OBSCURED IN SHADOW EITHER SIDE OF A BLINDING LIGHT. ONE BLOWS CIGARETTE SMOKE INTO THE PRISONER'S FACE

INTERROGATOR ONE:
Let's try again shall we? What exactly are you looking for?

PRISONER:
(fatigued)
I told you a thousand times, we don't really know.

INTERROGATOR TWO:
Aha! You said "we"... so you have accomplices then?

PRISONER:
Yes, yes. I can't do it all myself can I?

INTERROGATOR ONE:
You and your pals - we assume you are looking for Intelligence of some sort?

PRISONER:
That's the general idea.

INTERROGATOR TWO:
And who are these characters you mentioned?

PRISONER:
... If you don't know, I can't tell you. It should be obvious!!!

INTERROGATOR ONE: (holds burning cigarette to Prisoner's face)
Tell us what you know about the plot, or what's obvious will be this fag in your eye , scumbag!

PRISONER:
I don't know about any plot! Are we done?

INTERROGATOR TWO RESTRAINS INTERROGATOR ONE AND THEY BOTH WALK AWAY FROM THE PRISONER

Cut To:

CORRIDOR - CLOSEUP OF TWO "NORMAL' LOOKING GUYS. ON THE DOOR THEY HAVE JUST EXITED IS A SIGN "BBC WRITERSROOM"

INTERROGATOR ONE:
They really DON'T know what they are looking for !

INTERROGATOR TWO:
Unbelievable.

INTERROGATOR ONE OPENS THE DOOR AND LEANS IN

INTERROGATOR ONE:
Ok, thanks Micheal - we'll mail it next week then.

This is a great idea, well executed but as a writer I read looking for the telegraph and when I saw the word 'plot' I guessed the ending and the premise - although not the actual department it's based in.

Also logically I thought the pushy interrogators should've been Beeb staff harrying a writer over his pitch, rather than aggressive writers harrying the writers' room.

Ah very clever

Quote: SlagA @ December 8 2008, 10:40 PM GMT

This is a great idea, well executed but as a writer I read looking for the telegraph and when I saw the word 'plot' I guessed the ending and the premise - although not the actual department it's based in.

Also logically I thought the pushy interrogators should've been Beeb staff harrying a writer over his pitch, rather than aggressive writers harrying the writers' room.

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Thanks for the feedback. It's a delicate setup trying to tie it into the elements of writing - I did wonder about "plot" but I was swayed by the conspiracy connotation, thought it might prevent the telegraphing - alas I did not account for the highly tuned radar that is SlagA ! Anyway, this was just a bit of fun, please feel free to edit and play around with it - I'd like to see your version with the Beeb staff etc.....

It's obviously a bit of fun, but I think SlagA is right. I also telegraphed from the "Plot" line. I don't think it's the use of the word "plot", but an unnatural sounding sentence. If you said "How long have you been plotting for" or something else that fits the deceit better then you can get away with it.