I have recently written a short piece of dramatic fiction entitled Cottaging. I was wondering whether it is better as a written piece, or if it would be better as a short film. Decide for yourself: http://www.docdroid.net/2ydx/cottaging.pdf.html
Cottaging - A short story
I haven't read it but I think "Homes under the hammer" have got this niche covered.
I lie - I did read it. It would make an excellent short film. The shorter the better.
Didn't read too far - it got too nasty for me.
Obviously you have technical strengths but there isn't a sense of world beyond people. People are gigantic in your story. In reality, they are minute compared with the whole. Additionally, there are levelling themes but the context is extremely capitalist. There is not enough to suggest anything other than modish motives. You might, though, wish to discuss your personal opinions on Henry the Eighth with Professor David Starkey.