Ice Cream Factory Interview

If anyone has time please could you just look at this one and see if it reads well enough/ makes the joke I intended? Thanks guys

Ice Cream Factory Job Interview
A man goes for an interview at an Ice Cream factory but faces a difficult line of questioning from the Interviewer which eventually leads to a startling admission.

Interviewer
Tell me, why did you apply for this job?

Candidate
I really appreciate all of the company's products and I understand that you are very caring employer...

Interviewer
(Interrupting)
No. Come on, answer honestly - Why do you want the job?

Candidate
There are many opportunities to advance up the company...

Interviewer
(Interrupting)
*Imitates incorrect buzzer noise* No!

Candidate
My wife and I are planning to start family...

Interviewer
(Interrupting)
You really expect me to believe that you applied for the job of 'Ice Cream Taster' just because you like the business ethics or promotion prospects. Come on be honest.

Candidate
(Coughs Nervously)
Okay. Honestly? The main reason I applied for the job... I wanted to urinate in the Mint Chocolate Chip mix.

Interviewer
That is not the answer I was expecting. Hmmmm... I have to say I admire your honesty. You're Hired!

Ok Joe, no one else has dared answer - so I will.

It's not very good and it's not funny.
We don't need the full description of what will happen during the sketch. It sort of takes away the point.

Ice Cream Factory Job Interview

would have been sufficient.

Quote: Stephen Goodlad @ June 23 2013, 9:54 AM BST

Ok Joe, no one else has dared answer - so I will.

It's not very good and it's not funny.
We don't need the full description of what will happen during the sketch. It sort of takes away the point.

would have been sufficient.

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Thanks for 'daring' to reply on behalf of everyone else Stephen. I do actually appreciate your feedback, however brutal and lacking in construct -

Perhaps this one is just funnier in my head than it is written down

Joe it was alight on the lead up but you must be able to see that it really needed a bigger punch.

Yeah I know - it probably didn't come out the way I had hoped in my head - live and learn hey

Just create a better punch line, the platform is fine as it is.

A nice idea and the build up worked but it was let down by the poor ending.

I can only echo what others have said about some nice dialogue, but an ending which falls flat on its face.

Also, I think you need to get in a mention that it's a job in an ice cream factory. Explaining that the setting is an ice cream factory is all very good on paper, but the audience won't have a clue where it's set.

Thanks guys

the joke was supposed to be that it is a serious looking interview and the audience don't know what it is for. then when it is revealed that it is a job for 'ice cream taster' the audience is supposed to expect the candidate say that his reason for applying is because he loves ice cream, when in actual fact he has a different, more sick reason. and then the final joke was that the interviewer still wanted to hire him.

i didnt manage to get it across as I wanted and like I say some things are funnier in my head than in reality. I am still new to all of this so there is an awful lot to work on. perhaps I need to develop more of a punchline in my work.

i do appreciate the guidance though - cheers

You had it planned out, which was good.
Bring the Ice Cream in earlier let the audience be led down that path.
With a slightly different twist that's not "vulgar seemingly for the sake of it" then it's got good possibilities.

yeah I see what you mean - I completely agree

cheers

Although the punch line wasn't very strong well done for a good attempt. Things often seem funnier in the mind than on the page but on this site at least the advice is mostly helpful and will help you to improve.

Thanks OTTY -that's exactly what I thought, I put it in critique because I knew it wasnt fully formed and just wanted some help which I got eventually

appreciate your words of encouragement man