http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tNPk5LrSHVs
Phishismy xx
I am looking for your opinion
Good work and a cracking concept. Do feel as though you could have stuck to one idea and ended up with a leaner, less diluted sketch though. The core idea of a H&S type doing an on the spot review of an electric chair is great, but the graphology stuff struck me as a bit unnecessary. Might be worth dropping that angle and seeing if what you're left with is an improvment.
Well made but I thought the actress was a bit hammy.
I'm assuming that the photo by the power switch and the song at the end are jokes that most Israelis won't get?
Quote: Jinky @ April 12 2013, 11:27 AM BSTI thought the actress was a bit hammy.
*Insert pork joke here.
Ummm....something about 'kosher'.
No not for me this one, it was set up to do far better than it did.
The set was fine as was the camera work and the actors weren't bad at all
but it needs to be funnier script wise for me.
I liked this but it's a little long and untidy and the joke is kinda apparent from early on.
Also maybe get a little help witht he subtitles?
inspired me to ressurect an old sketch runner.
Quote: David Bussell @ April 12 2013, 11:24 AM BSTGood work and a cracking concept. Do feel as though you could have stuck to one idea and ended up with a leaner, less diluted sketch though. The core idea of a H&S type doing an on the spot review of an electric chair is great, but the graphology stuff struck me as a bit unnecessary. Might be worth dropping that angle and seeing if what you're left with is an improvment.
+1
I agree with Teddy on this one. Could have been so much more, but nonetheless a good concept for a sketch.
A great idea, some of the gags were chuckle worthy... if they had been stronger in parts it would've been a winner. Nonetheless I think this was a good effort...
Like the Kafkaesque concept and opening and the notices. Not really sure whether the graphology/singing was the right direction to head in, but maybe it makes more sense to Israelis
Thanks a lot.
I know the concept is good but something mismatched along the way.
Someone advised that it could be better if the conndemned man was entusiastic
to reply and the surveyor was reluctant.
Jinky you are right- How do you know the Prime Minister ?
Anyway I am going to upload the longer version which adds another angle.
By The way -What is going on in UK since Monty Phyton?
There was the "Little Britain" but for the last years I
have found myself flitting with your neglected cousin at the south hemesphire.
That is "We could be hereos" and such.
Anything new worth watching from the island?
Longer version http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pWfXZ3KbJZ4