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Baker Street
Liked this lots,good stuff. But because I'm in nit-picking mode can I suggest dropping the Coke stuff-it's not a drug thats generally injected and it adds nothing to the sketch. That aside though,I'd watch this-just be careful when you continue it as parodys of Holmes have been done to death and you need to make sure you can keep it original.
Quote: niteowl @ February 5, 2008, 9:44 PMLiked this lots,good stuff. But because I'm in nit-picking mode can I suggest dropping the Coke stuff-it's not a drug thats generally injected and it adds nothing to the sketch. That aside though,I'd watch this-just be careful when you continue it as parodys of Holmes have been done to death and you need to make sure you can keep it original.
Holmes injects cocaine - the famous seven percent solution.
Having said that the old coke as a drug/drink has been done to death, even if the anachronistic expression was eloquent.
The dialogue worked well but it wasn't a laugh-fest. I saw it working as a stage play in that it was gentle and warm.
Mrs Hudson is not an attractive lady (certainly not young). I don't know if this is intended to be a joke but if it is it missed me.
That Bob Holness bit at the start was just weird. I have no idea what that's supposed to mean!
Just be careful of the fact that this idea really is as old as the hills. Personally I'd subvert the Holmes stuff much more to make it fresher; that "I can tell you who's coming through the door" stuff, for instance, has of course been parodied countless times before.
Quote: James Williams @ February 5, 2008, 9:49 PMThat Bob Holness bit at the start was just weird. I have no idea what that's supposed to mean!
Urban myth has it that Bob Holness played sax on Baker Street. He didn't.
But his daughter was in the group Toto Cuelo who had a hit with "I Eat Cannibal". This was printed in my local paper as "I Eat Cannabis". I never looked at Blockbusters in the same way after that.
Quote: Badge @ February 5, 2008, 9:59 PMUrban myth has it that Bob Holness played sax on Baker Street. He didn't.
WTF?!
Funny.
Are you stalking me James??
Ok,so it was different in olden times.But it still adds nothing to the sketch,even if it does make sense to people who get the reference. And it annoys people like me who dont. And I'm not nice when I'm annoyed.
Seriously though,the sketch has a lot of good stuff and also stuff that can be cut back.The coke stuff fits the latter category,unless theres something seriously funny/relevant about it that I'm missing??
Quote: niteowl @ February 5, 2008, 10:09 PMAre you stalking me James??
Ok,so it was different in olden times.But it still adds nothing to the sketch,even if it does make sense to people who get the reference. And it annoys people like me who dont. And I'm not nice when I'm annoyed.
Seriously though,the sketch has a lot of good stuff and also stuff that can be cut back.The coke stuff fits the latter category,unless theres something seriously funny/relevant about it that I'm missing??
I think it's pretty famous that Holmes injected cocaine - I'd expect most people to understand the reference. But I am a Holmes afficionado. Having said that, as I say it's a reasonably eloquently expressed joke built on the shaky foundations of a cliche, so I'd kill it.
Hi chimes,
A nice read. Well written. Must say it reminds me a bit of the Michael Caine/Ben Kingsley "Without A Clue" Holmes parody.
Little nit picks (of course!):
"Mrs Hudson! You’ve been robbed!" - An Oldie (but okay, a goodie).
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And maybe a slight alteration?
HOLMES:
One moment. Do you by chance know the young boy from the pie shop?
MRS HUDSON:
Pretty little skinny thing with long blonde hair and the big blue eyes, Sir?
HOLMES:
The very same. Now, this man downstairs – you wouldn’t say he resembles him in any way, would you?
MRS HUDSON:
I can’t say I noticed a resemblance, Sir.
HOLMES:
Well, what about his age? Would he, for instance, be old enough to be his father?
MRS HUDSON:
It’s possible, Sir. But this gentleman being of a different class to any shopboy, I shouldn’t think they’re related.
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Finally (I think)
why is Watson asking Holmes about the room when surely he would have told Mrs Hudson he was calling about the vacant rooms when she answered the door?
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Still liked it though. 
Didn't do much for me.
It didn't have any humour in it whatsoever, it just seemed a pseudo-intelligent bland excuse to have characters say things like 'What a damned pity!!" and all that 'You sir, are an arse' type dialogue.
I also found it arse-bustingly pretentious.
Quote: Seefacts @ February 6, 2008, 9:49 AMDidn't do much for me.
It didn't have any humour in it whatsoever, it just seemed a pseudo-intelligent bland excuse to have characters say things like 'What a damned pity!!" and all that 'You sir, are an arse' type dialogue.
I also found it arse-bustingly pretentious.
Quote: bushbaby @ February 6, 2008, 9:54 AM
Good response.
What's wrong with that - OH NO, A NEGATIVE CRITIQUE!!
It had no humour - that wasn't a sketch. The dialogue was overly-grandiose and smug and it had no jokes.
It had the sort of feel where you can imagine the author thinking it was genius simply because it has an old style to it.
Quote: Chimes of Freedom @ February 6, 2008, 10:04 AMTell the truth, Seefacts.
You love it and your dearest wish is that one day you might be able to write something even one per cent as good.
Come, touch the hem of my raiment.
"Yes, that's quite correct, sir. I am indeed perplexed that you solved such a unfathomable crime, before the clock had yet struck 10."
Oh, look, I just did.
Seriously, get over yourself.
I'm curious as to what makes you laugh.
My laughter kicks in mainly when someone is 'sapped' but I find other stuff amusing too.
Quote: bushbaby @ February 6, 2008, 10:13 AMI'm curious as to what makes you laugh.
My laughter kicks in mainly when someone is 'sapped' but I find other stuff amusing too.
Lots of stuff makes me laugh, just not pretentious cliche.
The only thing to come out of this sketch is that I can't stop humming Baker Street.