Well thank you Seefacts. I agree with the grossness, it's lazy writing on my behalf. As I mention in the paragraph before the piece, it was really a practice with free flowing dialogue, but some of the criticisms where they characters didn't seem to separate from each other, so I ditched two of them and added more action and concentrated on just the two you see now.
As for that video, if it's the one I think you mean, then yes I agree, it's now hidden from public view, not deleted though because I need reminding not to do that sort of thing again, lol.
Cheers.