Okay so this is an audio sketch I did at home. It's called Mafia Ice Cream Men. (I do that sort of thing - some blokes have their football, I have sound effects cds!)
I've since fell out of love with the ending but can't be arsed to re-record it. Anyhoo, here it is.
http://www.channel4.com/4laughs/enjoy/userMediaDetails.jsp?userMediaId=1707
Oh and yes, that bald specky twat is me.
I like the voices and the atmospheric dripping. I like all the sound effects used.
I would like to see a few more gags in it but it was enjoyable to listen to in a more soap way rather than a comedy way.
Quote: Hoskinator @ January 30, 2008, 4:40 PMI like the voices and the atmospheric dripping. I like all the sound effects used.
I would like to see a few more gags in it but it was enjoyable to listen to in a more soap way rather than a comedy way.
Cheers for the listen. Sorry it's not your type of thing - my humour is more League Of Gentlemen-ish I suppose, mixing forceful, sometimes scary characters with absurd situations. I don't really do traditional 'gags'.
Wow that's top quality Perry, are all the voices yours?
Quote: bushbaby @ January 30, 2008, 11:37 PMWow that's top quality Perry, are all the voices yours?
Thanks! Yeah I do all the voices and music. I'm thinking about knocking up a ten minute sketch show demo and sending it to Radio 4. I've no real interest in performing but if I have to to get an idea across, I will.
Quote: Chimes of Freedom @ February 1, 2008, 10:21 AMThe ending (the gunfire interrupting the dialogue) is first-class.
The rest of the sketch needs to be a LOT funnier.
The basic idea (Mafia ice cream men) is funny and promises a lot of laughs but the pre-ending dialogue fails to deliver on the promise. In particular, Walls' Feasts are NOT funny and their disappearance should NOT be used as the ultimate crime in this sketch.
Curly Wurlies are VERY funny. I know they're not ice cream and I'm not suggesting you use them in this sketch. I'm just making the point that some names are funny and some aren't. Coco Pops are funny. Shredded Wheat isn't.
The sketch has potential but needs work.
Thanks Chimes. You know, you remind me of someone I once knew. He had a rude eye for detail too. The object of the Don's fury was originally Funny Feet, not Walls Feasts. Not sure why I changed it. I dunno - I think Feasts work too - after all they are the most delicious of ice-creamy sweetmeats. Apart from Magnums. But "Nobody toucha ma Magnums" doesn't work. "Nobody toucha ma Funny Feet" DOES work though, and now I'm wondering why I changed it. Coco Pops are funnier than Shredded Wheat because they have a hard "K" sound in them. Same goes for Curlie Wurlies. It's been proved by comedy scientists.
Quote: Perry Nium @ February 1, 2008, 10:48 AMThanks Chimes. You know, you remind me of someone I once knew. He had a rude eye for detail too.
...rude eye...rude eye... rings a bell for some reason.
Where have I heard that before! 
Perry your little video thing is making me feel queezy.
Yet I can't stop looking at it. Am I unwell?
Quote: Stu R @ February 1, 2008, 11:35 AMPerry your little video thing is making me feel queezy.
Yet I can't stop looking at it. Am I unwell?
You're not unwell, you'te just naturally drawn to the
erotic art of Japanese Nose-Snogging, you proboscis-sucking swine!
Hi Perry
Everthing I've read of yours so far has been quality, and this is no exception - loved it. Your humour and style are right up my street and I look forward to reading/hearing more from you. I do agree that the feast was the wrong choice (devoid of 'k's as it is), but enjoyed it nonetheless.
Hi Perry.
For me, the (sweet) meat of it wasn't so funny. It felt like a retread of a very similar League of Gentlemen sketch where a greek father disowns his son over a packet of sweets stolen from the family corner shop.
The gun gag at the end was righteous though, and the performance and background touches top notch. I particularly liked the way the victim's Italian accent occasionally slipped into your own.
I thought the production and voice acting were great. The gun shots at the end were the highlight but I did enjoy the lead-up also. Nice one.
Bo.
Perry, loving your other stuff. Like David, I thought this was a little familiar to the very same LofG sketch, especially the missing stock subject matter.
Voices and production were rock solid. Although maybe the reverb was a touch heavy on the victim's voice (if I remember right)
Quote: SlagA @ February 2, 2008, 11:58 AMPerry, loving your other stuff. Like David, I thought this was a little familiar to the very same LofG sketch, especially the missing stock subject matter.
Voices and production were rock solid. Although maybe the reverb was a touch heavy on the victim's voice (if I remember right)
Cheers Slag. (Feels funny calling you that - I usually keep that special term of endearment for the wife) Yep you're absolutely right, it is very similar to TLOG'S "Pop" character and as you say, a very specific sketch where Pop admonishes his sons for losing stock, so it's a non-starter really. I enjoyed doing it though and thought I'd post. Funny how everyone on here's saying the ice cream gags aren't funny though - the folks at Channel 4 singled them out as some of the best material they'd had in ages. Still, horses for courses and the sketch is dead because of the resemblance to Pop anyway.
Quote: ian_w @ February 1, 2008, 4:15 PMHi Perry
Everthing I've read of yours so far has been quality, and this is no exception - loved it. Your humour and style are right up my street and I look forward to reading/hearing more from you. I do agree that the feast was the wrong choice (devoid of 'k's as it is), but enjoyed it nonetheless.
Hey cheers Ian, you're very kind!
Quote: David Bussell @ February 2, 2008, 10:27 AMHi Perry.
For me, the (sweet) meat of it wasn't so funny. It felt like a retread of a very similar League of Gentlemen sketch where a greek father disowns his son over a packet of sweets stolen from the family corner shop.
The gun gag at the end was righteous though, and the performance and background touches top notch. I particularly liked the way the victim's Italian accent occasionally slipped into your own.
Hah cheers David - yes it is an unintentional Pop rip-off, and so the sketch is dead to me. Let us speak of it no longer.
Glad you liked my hybrid Sicilian / Geordie accent though. I meant to do that. Honest. 
Yep, re: C4, your work is quality. 