Hope you all enjoy the first part of my video diary...
New video of my alter ego Spyridoula the ghost
Yeah, liked it. The sound was a bit ropey in parts but generally I liked the concept and reckon it has legs.
This isn't a criticism but it might be an idea to research the subject a bit more as genuine haunting cases might provide you with ideas for more material. For example, ghosts aren't generally associated with moving around from one location to another.
Check out some of the stuff here http://www.forteantimes.com/strangedays/ghostwatch/archive/ for example and also the various reports to be found here: http://www.forteantimes.com/forum/viewforum.php?f=21&sid=ab91a32c96b17eaa2c6d193503c5af1c and here: http://www.forteantimes.com/forum/viewforum.php?f=18
Also, Spyridoula? Ghosts usually have more mundane names, eg Mary Webster.
I reckon if you keep it as close to how the subject is reported you could be onto a winner. Your acting and editing is very good and there were some fine ideas. I look forward to your next instalment.
Thanks for your reply and feedback!
My pleasure. Thanks for the post.
I also like the way you are very matter-of-fact and don't try to ham it up as either being all ghostie or gothy. If that makes sense.
Yes, I'm glad it comes across that way as that's how I intended it to look.
Thank you
This is rather good funny nicely acted
And to all you other showvasers out there clearly scripted
Which is a good thing
Maybe make it a little more natural in the next piode
I understood some of that...
Really good, and very clever script, I like the delivery your comfortable with it and I liked her, she says it as it is, like a dead dot cotton.
I think, it could do with splitting up into smaller chunks, maybe like have a short video of each member of your family a 1:30 vid of your mum I liked the sound of her, and your dad the poltergeist, he could have his own show.
I agree with Ignatius about the sound, but you know that already probably, writing and delivery is really good though
Quote: SummerRay @ October 24 2012, 10:17 PM BSTI understood some of that...
Damn predictive typing
I just mean here and there it sounds like you're structuring a gag or setting it up as opposed to natural dialogue but that's easy enough to fix.
Thanks all for your feedback
Maybe run one of your. Scripts through critiqu. though your video I impressive and I'd say pushes the be or showcase up a notch
Again, I understood some of that! Sorry!