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I like the idea, but could you highlight that its lara croft? Also I'm not a gamer but could it be more modern, like tetris (I said I wasn't a gamer!) Good concept though

Will add a line
Cheers

The end isn't up to the quality of the rest of the sketch, its not necessarily a missing punch line it just requires a better excuse for the shooting.

It would work if at the start the professor uses the pad to enter in a code like a you do when putting a cheat in and starts addressing Crofty through the TV screen sort of stopping her in mid action and striking up a conversation with her.
It would be a fantastic visual surpassing Aha's video caper by a country f**king mile.

EDIT
Instead of a professor go with the actual program writer

I know what you mean Teddy
I just fancied putting something in Critique.
Otherwise I'd feel bad when I go on the "Whatever happened to Critique thread"

This made me laugh out loud. I didn't see the punchline coming at all, (despite the clever flag about her having off days and falling off ledges etc).

I'd have to disagree with Teddy's comment that it needs a stronger punchline, as the one it has works spot on for me, as evidenced by the out loud laughter.

Thanks for posting.

This is good but maybe a little long winded.

Also maybe clarify if Lara is making herself jump or its her new inexperienced player.

Maybe I should change the line to "Sorry I meant to Jump"

Maybe I just did.

Quote: Steve Sunshine @ September 26 2012, 11:15 PM BST

Maybe I should change the line to "Sorry I meant to Jump"

Maybe I just did.

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What was it before?

*whispers* Do you know there's an extra apostrophe in it now?

Hehe
Not anymore.

It was press jump

Quote: Steve Sunshine @ September 26 2012, 11:28 PM BST

Hehe
Not anymore.

It was press jump

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For what it's worth I prefer "press jump" ...despite not being able to remember it only seconds ago.

I may change it back.
Despite not remembering why I changed it in the first place.

Punchline as it is ('meant jump') made me laugh.

Also particularly liked the Woman in Shorts line.

Had this been sitting in a pile of sketches for ages or did something remind you about Lara Croft recently?!

It was sitting around as an idea.
My next one will be even more up to date, it's about Manic Miner