Overlooking a booking

We see a hotel reception area

A man with a large bow and a quiver full of arrows on his back walks up and rings the bell

MAN
"I'd like a room overlooking the Zoo please"

OWNER
"Overlooking the Zoo, I'll certainly check sir, but I'm not that confident"

MAN
"Thank you"

OWNER
"It's as I thought sir, I'm afraid we don't have any rooms available overlooking the zoo, they're nearly always booked months in advance"

The man looks crestfallen

MAN
"That's understandable thanks anyway"

The owner is loath to lose a booking

OWNER
"There's plenty of space available at the back of the building sir"

MAN
"No thanks"

OWNER
"It overlooks the park!"

MAN
"Naah"

The owner can see that the man's interest has been roused and presses home the advantage

OWNER
"You can clearly see the lake"

MAN
"Naah, I think I'll leave it"

OWNER
"The lakes full of ducks sir"

MAN
"I have to admit I'm tempted"

OWNER
"Big fat lazy ducks"

MAN
"Go on then I'll stay the weekend"

OWNER
"That'll be three hundred plus VAT!"

Nice one Teddy. I like it. I can't find anyhing negative

What is the punchline? The owner being so greedy that he doesn't care about the man shooting arrows out of the window?

You've got the best and biggest cynic ever created by a writer as your avatar and you're asking questions like that!

Quote: Teddy Paddalack @ September 19 2012, 4:47 PM BST

You've got the best and biggest cynic ever created by a writer as your avatar and you're asking questions like that!

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Ooooh, that statement sounds very similar to my post yesterday...adressed to that "art-punk rebel comedian".

So by that you mean that you knew what you were saying in the first instance.

I only tried to understand your sketch. Maybe I didn't get it fully because English is not my native language, maybe I just don't like it...

You know what I came on to write comedy and I don't need to be involved in an International incident, lets settle for you don't like it.

I like the beginning...but I expected something different as a punchline

I settle for half or as you would say .50

Hi Teddy

I like it. It has a surreal quality.

I think GB is correct however about the set up. If the gag is that the Hotel keeper will go to any lengths, like a dark Bazil Fawty then the sketch becomes a series of Sketches that let the mind wander

A nun walks through carrying a bazoka. A club Scout with a shovel..

Just a thought, but this is my favourite so far, it has wings

APS

Yeah. That made me chuckle.

Big fat lazy ducks. How could you resist?