hello.
is there are any writers here with time on there hands and wouldn't mind reading my moc-doc "spanners" it about a garage based in yorkshire, to point out any major flaws before I send it to the bbc. the moc-doc is complete but I feel it defo needs a second set of eyes. its original and funny (so my wife tells me) it's 90 pages long, if there is any kind of re-write or editing involved then credit will be received where credit is due.
thanks people..nige
You could try putting it on Circalit.com, it might get a a few reads and reviews plus you could post the link on here...
What format/slot do you see this running in?
Because at 90 pages (depending on which format you're writing in) it's pretty long for TV.
Better to have thought that through before you send off.
hello. the moc-doc is in three parts, each part cover's 2 days. I was thinking they might be able run it for one day a week for three weeks. as a three part thing. not sure! what do you think? or should I take it apart and make it an hour one off thing, there is that many gags and numptyness in it I don't know where to start breaking it down. 
I would have a good look at your grammar too.
If it is anything like the examples you are posting on here it will not be read beyond the first page.
Hi Nigel
I will give it a read if your willing.
I will feed back my findings, if any, ASAP.
PDF or Doc is fine
J
Post a link to the first 10 pages in Critique - you'll get more reads that way.
Anymore than 10 and you'll struggle.
Quote: Stephen Goodlad @ September 13 2012, 12:21 PM BSTI would have a good look at your grammar too.
If it is anything like the examples you are posting on here it will not be read beyond the first page.
you are right! I admit that my grammar isn't up to scratch and it is a downfall of mine. when I set about writing anything I just blaze away not thinking, but hey you live and learn and I am learning all the time, hence being on this forum and learning from some of the best... 
Quote: nigel @ September 13 2012, 11:39 AM BSThello. the moc-doc is in three parts, each part cover's 2 days. I was thinking they might be able run it for one day a week for three weeks. as a three part thing. not sure! what do you think? or should I take it apart and make it an hour one off thing, there is that many gags and numptyness in it I don't know where to start breaking it down.
BBC Writersroom are looking for talented writers, not scripts to produce.
Also, they only want to see one episode of your script.
Is it for WritersRoom?
If so, a moc-doc might not be the best example of one's writing - it's so performance/style led.
Either way - it's the first ten pages you need to worry about...
i'm only sending the first part as a calling card for the comedy that is within the moc-doc, but was living in hope that they might want to see the rest. I haven't sent anything to the BBC this will be my first thing.
Sorry, wouldn't know where to begin with a mocdoc. They are to me the cryptic crosswords of sitcoms, and I'm rubbish with CCs.
Mock doc, mock doc, mock doc. Anyone sending in something described as a 'moc' dock is stacking the odds against themselves.
A joke, Michael, punchline being stacking things in a dock? No, oh okay.
The trouble with moc docs is that they're so tired and well-worn these days.
And it's the sort of medium practically anybody could write/perform/film.
"Serious documentary, something goes wrong, awkward looks at the camera."
Way back in the 80s, Bad News Tour (Comic Strip Presents) cracked it, because that style was fresh. But not any more.
If you're thinking of punting out a moc doc these days, it would need a fresh take of the medium to succeed.