Comedy song writing tips

Morning all,

I have recently recorded a song for my attempt at a comedy song:

http://bit.ly/LevjC1

I'd love tips or feedback on the writing/ recording of the music, either musically or comedic wise!

Thanks

Tim

xxx

We don't much like multiple threads in these parts, stranger. *cocks shotgun*

Shotguns cock more like!

I got over excited! I'll stop.