The f***king olympics

BOB AND JEN ARE WATCHING TELLY IN THEIR CHAVVY LOUNGE

TV VO
And welcome to day 2 of the mens olympic synchronised swimming

BOB
Are we watching the olympics?

JEN
Yes Bob we are watching the olympics

TV VO
And the Ukranian team are doing something.

BOB
Are we watching the olympics?

JEN
Yes Bob we are watching the olympics

TV VO
And there seems to be some splashing in the billion pound swimming pool. Which after this week will be used souly for tramps to shag in. That and the occaisonal gangland dog based murder like in Snatch

BOB
Are we watching the olympics?

JEN
Bob for the last time we are watching the f**king olympics!

BOB
Just what I wanted to hear.

BOB CHANGES THE CHANNEL WITH THE TV REMOTE

TV VO
Welcome back to the f**king olympics on channel 5, you join us for the 100 meter cum shot!

If we're writing about the f**king olympics, I expect better than 'it's on'. I quite like the 'the -enter team name- are doing something' idea, the rest is nowhere near as good as you're capable of making it

So my cunning twist punch that Bob Jen is sneakily trying to get Jen to allow him to watch olympics based porn on channel 5

ultimately fails?

oh well

Sometimes in the f**king olympics Sootyj, coming last isn't a fail.

With a pun like that you'll be for the high jump

The long jump

*is much too nice to mention that you've done too many asterisks*

Quote: sootyj @ June 21 2012, 10:26 PM BST

So my cunning twist punch that Bob Jen is sneakily trying to get Jen to allow him to watch olympics based porn on channel 5

ultimately fails?

oh well

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It's just that it's not really a punch, it's a segue into another theme. I'd like to read an interpretation of either idea as a piece on it's own, but you haven't laid the ground for the punch to be either expected or unexpected, it's just elsewhere. But I get bitchy whenever anyone so much as thinks 'olympics' near me, so ignore my unnecessarily critical critique