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INT. STRIP CLUB – DAY
A BOUNCER KEEPS AN EYE ON THE REVELRY AS AN ENTHUSIASTIC STAG PARTY BRAY OVER A TECHNO DIRGE.
ONE OF THE PARTY ISN'T JOINING IN THE FUN. HE SITS, DOE-EYED, TRANSFIXED ON THE STRIPPER.
NOTICING HIM, THE STRIPPER STEPS DOWN FROM THE STAGE AND MOVES IN FOR A LAPDANCE. NERVOUSLY, THE MAN GOES TO PUT A HAND ON HER SHOULDER BUT…
BAM! THE BOUNCER KNOCKS THE MAN FLYING FROM HIS STOOL.
BOUNCER:
No touching!
INT. STRIP CLUB - LATER
THE CLUB IS EMPTY NOW. ALL BUT ONE OF THE STAG PARTY HAVE LEFT. ONLY THE MAN REMAINS – A WAD OF BLOODIED TISSUE IN EACH NOSTRIL.
THE STRIPPER COMFORTS HIM, OFFERING A FRESH TISSUE. HE GOES TO TAKE IT BUT…
…THE BOUNCER SHAKES HIS HEAD AMONISHINGLY.
THE MAN SHRINKS. THE STRIPPER SMILES SWEETLY. HE BLUSHES.
CUT TO:
MONTAGE:
INT. MUSEUM – DAY
THE MAN AND THE STRIPPER ENJOY A DAY OUT. THEY LAUGH, CHAT AND POINT OUT RELICS TO ONE ANOTHER.
EXT. PICNIC - DAY
A BEAUTIFUL SUMMER'S DAY. THE PAIR FEED EACH OTHER STRAWBERRIES. THEY'RE HAVING A WONDERUL TIME.
INT. RESTAURANT – DAY
ENJOYING A ROMANTIC CANDLELIT DINNER, THE COUPLE CLINK GLASSES.
END MONTAGE.
EXT. PORCH - NIGHT
THE MAN SEES THE STRIPPER HOME AFTER A NIGHT OUT. THEY GRIN AFFECTIONATELY AT EACH OTHER. THE MAN MOVES IN FOR A KISS BUT…
BAM! THE BOUNCER FLOORS HIM WITH A FLYING TACKLE.
BOUNCER:
No touching!
END.