I am currently working on breaking into the comedy scene in Plymouth and surrounding areas.
I have created a comedy vlog in order to gain feedback on topical jokes (as I will be constantly changing these through gigs) as well as general performance feedback.
I am looking for as much feedback as I can get, any help would be appreciated!
Very Frankie Boyle! I gasped a few times rather than laughed but that might just be my taste - the McCann joke was a step too far for me....
Leaving aside content, the continuous movement of the mic is very distracting and the sound isn't really good enough to hear everything you're saying - have you got a space to record in with less echo? If you're going to put stuff on YouTube to showcase, it's worth polishing as much as possible - first impressions do count.
Hope that's helpful
Alison.
Some very neat jokes
I liked the catholic marriage one and the Australia one especially.
So your joke style is nice, economic, strong punchline and straight there.
Heres what you need to change
1 Dump needlessly offensive stuff like the McCanns
2 Sort out that microphone it's annoying
3 Get an actual style the jokes are well told and signposted but with no intro, conclusion or linking between them you're letting them down a bit.
4 Telling jokes straight into a camera is also underselling, get an audience even if its just a couple of chums.
But yeh most jokes surprisingly good.
Trying to become a comedian by filming yourself telling jokes in an empty room is like trying to become a pornstar by filming yourself masturbating, pretty pointless and, of no real interest to anyone but yourself (you can use it to iron out the kinks in your technique), get out there at an open mic night and see how an audience react, they are your only judge as to what's funny.
Other than that, some good jokes, too much "shock" material for my liking though (still, that seems to be the case with almost every single open spot I see nowadays). As everyone else has said the main thing is to stop telegraphing the punchlines by dropping the mic away from your face.
Good luck.
Quote: Tony Cowards @ May 22 2012, 1:28 PM BSTTrying to become a comedian by filming yourself telling jokes in an empty room is like trying to become a pornstar by filming yourself masturbating
Whoah, buddy! Some of us like that stuff!
Quote: Tony Cowards @ May 22 2012, 1:28 PM BSTTrying to become a comedian by filming yourself telling jokes in an empty room is like trying to become a pornstar by filming yourself masturbating, pretty pointless and, of no real interest to anyone but yourself
Good luck.
Dear Internet,
Mods? Hello? Why didn't my naughty words filter asterix those vile terms?
I'm out there pounding stage every night of the week doing material on folding down a pram and facebook updates/statuses/layout/addiction/love of/hatred of/pics/shame there's no status that says 'lonely' lololzz! etc probably forever, until I die, and I'm okay with that.
So imagine my aghast and astonished reaction to reading the words of these smut-mouthed swill-merchants like Cowards, using swearwords instead of a family friendly payoff. TOMMY COOPER MUST BE TURNING IN HIS GRAVE as Comedy swirls the drain, these blue-mouthed mavericks hold the plug and laugh like villains.
My computer is in the same house as CHILDREN! Mr Cowards, CHILDREN! who could quite have easily logged online, "Hey Comedy, let's read this.." Then boom - descriptions of anti-Christian home videos are burned into innocent minds forever.. our children are corrupted and the future of the planet is doomed.
We had proper comedians when I was young, not this rabble, not a bow-tie in sight, wouldn't do them any harm if got themselves an haircut at the same time.
Yours,
Concerned Brit.
Quote: JackDaniels2 @ May 24 2012, 2:04 AM BSTDear Internet,
Mods? Hello? Why didn't my naughty words filter asterix those vile terms?I'm out there pounding stage every night of the week doing material on folding down a pram and facebook updates/statuses/layout/addiction/love of/hatred of/pics/shame there's no status that says 'lonely' lololzz! etc probably forever, until I die, and I'm okay with that.
So imagine my aghast and astonished reaction to reading the words of these smut-mouthed swill-merchants like Cowards, using swearwords instead of a family friendly payoff. TOMMY COOPER MUST BE TURNING IN HIS GRAVE as Comedy swirls the drain, these blue-mouthed mavericks hold the plug and laugh like villains.
My computer is in the same house as CHILDREN! Mr Cowards, CHILDREN! who could quite have easily logged online, "Hey Comedy, let's read this.." Then boom - descriptions of anti-Christian home videos are burned into innocent minds forever.. our children are corrupted and the future of the planet is doomed.
We had proper comedians when I was young, not this rabble, not a bow-tie in sight, wouldn't do them any harm if got themselves an haircut at the same time.
Yours,
Concerned Brit.
haha, what?!
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Thanks for the feedback!
I live in a city that seems devoid of comedy, so getting in front of an audience is difficult, hence creating the vlog.
Any more feedback would still be appreciated!
Sean 