I don't get the pillow/cock thing, a bit too crude.
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if crude is a bar for joke telling/writing we are all in trouble. 
Maybe you could substitute 'giant marshmallow' for 'giant pink marshmallow' and end it with something like;
'when I woke up, my wife was on the phone cancelling her masectomy appointment'.
Its actually quite good
But its an antijoke based on a not that well known joke
So if perhaps was presaged by one or two gronaers could work better?
Quote: Nigel Kelly @ May 6 2012, 12:45 PM BSTMaybe you could substitute 'giant marshmallow' for 'giant pink marshmallow' and end it with something like;
'when I woke up, my wife was on the phone cancelling her masectomy appointment'.
Good point wish I'd thought of that
Quote: zooo @ May 5 2012, 4:06 PM BSTOh, I didn't get the whole 'we were supposed to think it was a pillow' thing.
It's an old joke.
I'm with the 'get it but don't think it's very funny' crew.
Could leave it pretty much as it is but disguise it more by loading stuff on the front end. Something like
My flatmate's a big guy, looks a bit like the pillsbury doughboy. I came in one day and he was baking all sorts of cakes and sweets and the like, waddling around the kitchen. I went to sleep that night dreaming I was eating a big marshmellow. Woke up with his cock in my mouth.
nah, it still doesn't work imo
Just like to know why Stephen insists on a new thread for every one of his jokes. Why can't you bulk them together or something?
Quote: Overlay @ May 6 2012, 3:49 PM BSTI'm with the 'get it but don't think it's very funny' crew.
Could leave it pretty much as it is but disguise it more by loading stuff on the front end. Something like
My flatmate's a big guy, looks a bit like the pillsbury doughboy. I came in one day and he was baking all sorts of cakes and sweets and the like, waddling around the kitchen. I went to sleep that night dreaming I was eating a big marshmellow. Woke up with his cock in my mouth.
nah, it still doesn't work imo
If you telegraphed the punchline anymore you'd need semaphore flags
Semaphore could work, neglected artform imo
Agree with Chappers.
Quote: Chappers @ May 6 2012, 3:57 PM BSTJust like to know why Stephen insists on a new thread for every one of his jokes. Why can't you bulk them together or something?
The ones I want critique on are far and few between. I know if my others are good bad or poor.
And the 'good' will never appear here (I am in the game of selling them)
This gag does not have to be a 'stand up's' line. It would probably convert to a short cartoon or card. I got what I had found from this gag, hence the title some like, some don't and some didn't get it.
If you don't like the odd gag from me appearing Chappers old bean don't read em.
And please accept my sincere apologies for troubling you.
Quote: Stephen Goodlad @ May 6 2012, 6:00 PM BSTAnd the 'good' will never appear here (I am in the game of selling them)
Seems true. Wing em over to Mel Gibson old fruit, seems in his line.
I think it's fine to have a separate thread for any jokes.
I did get this one & it worked fine for what it is
Quote: Stephen Goodlad @ May 6 2012, 6:00 PM BSTAnd the 'good' will never appear here (I am in the game of selling them)
This may put me off reading them though
As I like good jokes if possible.
A tad obvious, why post worst?
So you published a joke not everyone likes (I liked it)
No need to huff abiut it
I mean there's no way this joke works as a cartoon or card
So it casts doubts on that claim