Jewish writer to Critique and add emphasis?

Scene in Ward 15(general admissions)just after tea and before meds round

Adendum: Back story- issues relating to second hospital and/or Health professionals Mix of ethinic and possibly multi sub- English -ethnic, muliti ethnic Welsh with loose-cannon Welsh-jewish health student with Zambian foster mother-single parent over the border in England(applies if in Wales).

2nd alternative proposal: New hospital in England Staffed with predominantly Welsh staff, Patients from English Multi-ethnic groups, pot dodgers, rural mis-fits,Pan ethnic with Mid-atlantic Barnstormer alcoholic doctor in the mould of Robbie Coltrane,Set in Hospital in Wales/English border. Hospital administrator has a fascination for Ventriloquists, surgical scars and sub-aquatic organ music

3rd proposal: Psychiatric rehabilitation unit threatened with closure has mass delusion of granduer by Patients and staff, go AWOL with re-socialisation money and are tracked down by an elite bunch of crack Irish psychiatrists through the Welsh Mountains using the latest Psychiatracking device and brewers croup. Token ethnic IRA claim responsibility.

Right...

what?

Quote: Snorbrick @ April 15 2012, 7:36 PM BST

Scene in Ward 15(general admissions)just after tea and before meds round

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Bit wordy.

Jennie(patient) Scene 1: Doctor,doctor, I need to speak on a matter of urgency. My life, my son and everything that has lead to this moment to my being in hospital...it's my husbands fault! It's imperative I tell you, I have nothing and for the first time in my life I'm about to unleash all my anguish, for the first time I'm cleansing and letting go of every fibre of love and hate and everything that lay in-between both those bookends of life's greatest mystery-love! Whats that noise doctor is he dying next door.What's wrong with him???...

Doctor: No, couldn't tell you information on other patients but I couldn't tell you anyway it's confidentiality.

Jennie: Please just promise me you wouldn't put me next to dying man?

Doctor: That's impossible, but let's not worry about that. What time is your son coming up?

Jennie: That's why I'm here, he's dead!

Doctor: I'm so sorry, is there anyone else for you?

Jennie: No, although I do feel I was to blame in some way, I could have protected him more.

Doctor: There a thousand stories and everyone has more than there fair share of of laughter, anger and futility.

Jennie: That reminds me, I have no one to sort out the bills.

Doctor: Well I'm sure we have your address so we'll sort that for you.

Jennie: Get the key from my pocket and make sure you bend down when your in the larder when you get my Shortbread you'll hit your head a big strapping fine man like yourself...and don't look at the mess, I'll be so embarrassed if you look at the mess.

Dog: Are animals left-handed?

Vet(brother of the Doctor): You mean Could you,a animal be left handed?

Vet:I think your on about the working dogs such as the sheep dogs but I don't see that many due to my practice being in the town, but I have to say I'm a bit unsure myself as I think I always ask for the dogs right paw as I'm left -handed but I'll try it out next time we have a dog in.

Dog:

Still don't get it. I see dialogue and I get the attempts but it is all starting from what? Surely not the into scene example at the top?