NJ - That's Unacceptable

I couldn't think of a decent scene setting intro - was trying to flag "unacceptable" as a Cameron catchphrase, because it is.

"That's Unacceptable!"

Justin intro:

It's a sobering thought for the bus drivers who recently won £38m on the Eurolottery that they could still only afford dinner with David Cameron once every other day for a year.

FX Fun advert style music

Voiceover:

New from Cameron Games comes "That's Unacceptable!", the game of dodging the blame and pretending absolutely nothing is your fault. It's simple - and easy to play! Start the game as the leader of your political party - roll the dice and try to get from one news bulletin to the next without taking responsibility for any of the behaviour of your Party - because that's when you shout...

All:

"That's Unacceptable!"

Voiceover:

...and it's absolutely nothing to do with you.

FX Rolling of a dice.

Voiceover:

You've rolled a six! Oh no! A disgraced former newspaper editor is given a leading position on your private staff! Luckily this has absolutely nothing to do with you! So let's pass the buck and shout...

All:

..."That's Unacceptable!"

FX Rolling of a dice.

Voiceover:

You've rolled a two!

Small child:

One, two. Awww! My Home Secretary has relaxed border controls and caused public outcry as an unknown number of immigrants are allowed into the country without any passport checks ...completely behind my back.

Voiceover:

No need to worry - despite her being a senior cabinet minister and your close political ally, it's absolutely nothing to do with you! Just shout....

All:

... "That's Unacceptable!"

Voiceover:

Yes, "That's Unacceptable". The game where anything can go wrong and all of it is absolutely nothing to do with you. Members of your party fixing expenses? Defence Minister gives his friend special access without security vetting? Schools rebuilding programme cut, reinstated and cut again? NHS reforms fundamentally changed but even then still rejected by doctors and health professionals? Play "That's Unacceptable!" and it's absolutely nothing to do with you! But now there's more. Mastered "That's Unacceptable!"? Try our latest game...

Small child:

My party treasurer has offered access to my diary for £250,000...without my having any knowledge of how such a thing could possibly happen.

All:

"That's Completely Unacceptable!"

Voiceover:

Yes "That's Unacceptable!" and "That's Completely Unacceptable!" - the fun games of passing the buck. Because when you are leader of the country but everything that goes wrong has absolutely nothing to do with you...

All:

"That's Unacceptable! "

Quote: Big Jack @ March 30 2012, 12:11 AM BST

I couldn't think of a decent scene setting intro - was trying to flag "unacceptable" as a Cameron catchphrase, because it is.

Voiceover:

Yes, "That's Unacceptable". The game where anything can go wrong and all of it is absolutely nothing to do with you. Members of your party fixing expenses? Defence Minister gives his friend special access without security vetting? Schools rebuilding programme cut, reinstated and cut again? NHS reforms fundamentally changed but even then still rejected by doctors and health professionals? Play "That's Unacceptable!" and it's absolutely nothing to do with you! But now there's more. Mastered "That's Unacceptable!"? Try our latest game...

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Nice concept. I thought the 'That's Unacceptable' refrain worked well, although there's maybe a bit of editing that could be done - namely the bit in the para above. I think you could cut the section where you list all the scandals/controversies as you've already established these in the previous lines - instead you could maybe just go straight to 'Mastered 'That's unacceptable...'

And I guess a meatier introduction at the top would have certainly helped - something linking politics to board games or some such.

Great concept, Jack, but this one needs tightening up. It's a bit dry too, so maybe some sillier situations for the examples of gameplay?

You're right about flagging the 'That's unacceptable!' as a catchphrase in Justin's intro cos I think you'll just lose people without making that clear. Also, wouldn't 'Unacceptable' work better as the name of the game, because then (later on) dragging in "And also, now available, maximum difficultly 'Completely Unacceptable' too!" and it scans better if you lose the 'That's'.

Dan