Hello Peeps
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_VLz_3Fqf_c (Updated version)
Would be grateful for any thoughts on the writing, performing (will probably redo a few lines) and editing. Slate away.
Thank you
Yacob
Depression Is No Longer Cool (Audio Sketch)
Really like it but given the subject matter think you could go even darker and maybe mention some alternatives that are weighed up for pros and cons in contrasting blase style 
Very good indeed, but worth putting through another draft - there is nothing that doesn't work, I just feel that it has the potential to be really great.
Very good, where's the animation this time? The last line when the therapist shouts out after him is ace. Was thinking maybe you could have James leave saying it's getting too expensive? then lead into the last line.
Quote: AJGO @ March 10 2012, 11:31 AM GMTReally like it but given the subject matter think you could go even darker and maybe mention some alternatives that are weighed up for pros and cons in contrasting blase style
There was a bit in the script about the patient thinking about getting some kind a sexual perversion but I cut it because is was too long and didn't really add anything. I'm sure I could go darker but not sure what would be the best way to go about it.
Quote: Timbo @ March 10 2012, 11:45 AM GMTVery good indeed, but worth putting through another draft - there is nothing that doesn't work, I just feel that it has the potential to be really great.
I've looked at it again and cut about 20 seconds that didn't have any jokes (up now). Hopefully it's an improvement.
Quote: Shandonbelle @ March 10 2012, 12:26 PM GMTVery good, where's the animation this time? The last line when the therapist shouts out after him is ace. Was thinking maybe you could have James leave saying it's getting too expensive? then lead into the last line.
Animation takes some time. Even if I were to do still bodies with lip-sync it'd take me at least one week to do the two minutes of dialogue.
Thanks again, everyone.
Quote: Yacob Wingnut @ March 11 2012, 10:03 AM GMTAnimation takes some time. Even if I were to do still bodies with lip-sync it'd take me at least one week to do the two minutes of dialogue.
I can imagine, enjoying most of the clips a lot though, with or without the animation.