How about giving it a topical twist?
I saw Gary Glitter was supposedly on twitter last week.
Disgusting.
There's only one thing worse than grooming people on line.
And that's grooming dogs.
(note if you set it up you don't even need to say grooming kids)
Quote: sootyj @ January 22 2012, 6:52 PM GMTHow about giving it a topical twist?
I saw Gary Glitter was supposedly on twitter last week.
Disgusting.
There's only one thing worse than grooming people on line.
And that's grooming dogs.
(note if you set it up you don't even need to say grooming kids)
No, don't do this.
Why not?
Quote: David Bussell @ January 22 2012, 4:33 PM GMTThat depends, is it about paedophiles? Because it's always nice to bookend a set.
The song/rap is only about 6 lines at the end and brings most of the points I made through the set together. Its done really daft, with my rapping sheep Ram Bling. Might work might not.
Get the flock out, that's a sheared heart attack, ewe.ve got some cheek
Quote: sootyj @ January 22 2012, 6:58 PM GMTWhy not?
Because it isn't very good. You did ask! I don't see how the introduction of known paedo Gary Glitter makes this more palatable.
At the end of the day the only judge of a material's worth is the audience, so do what you do and see how they respond.
Personally, I wouldn't open on a joke that is remotely controversial but then again, I'm a big wuss.
Good luck Leigh and let us know how you get on.
Quote: Badge @ January 22 2012, 7:08 PM GMTBecause it isn't very good. You did ask! I don't see how the introduction of known paedo Gary Glitter makes this more palatable.
Because it's topically relevant.
You'll get an "associative laugh" big error of a lot comedy writers is that everything must be a fully formed joke. Far from it, you can mix jokes with topics that are on people's minds. Hence the laughter comes from the association.
It's like a more sophisitcated version of going "know what I mean eh?"
Quote: Tony Cowards @ January 22 2012, 7:09 PM GMTAt the end of the day the only judge of a material's worth is the audience, so do what you do and see how they respond.
Personally, I wouldn't open on a joke that is remotely controversial but then again, I'm a big wuss.
Good luck Leigh and let us know how you get on.
a big, but highly succesful wuss lest we forget.
Gary Glitter has got out of prison, found himself a job in a dog grooming parlour, God help them puppies. Finally explains what the song leader of the pack was about.
Dont get dog grooming how would you even start.
Do you just poke them on facebook
Do you watch them coming out of puppy school
Hi Little doggy , what nice ears you got.
Takes being an animal lover to a whole new level.
What do you think of this, does it work better without the mention of kids.
So, you now think it's good to open with a paedo joke because it has a Gary Glitter reference? I despair! Your post contradicts everything else you've said!
Quote: leigh Stirrup @ January 22 2012, 7:17 PM GMTGary Glitter has got out of prison, found himself a job in a dog grooming parlour, God help them puppies. Finally explains what the song leader of the pack was about.
Dont get dog grooming how would you even start.
Do you just poke them on facebook
Do you watch them coming out of puppy school
Hi Little doggy , what nice ears you got.
Takes being an animal lover to a whole new level.What do you think of this, does it work better without the mention of kids.
Really, seriously, don't mention Gary Glitter. Your original is much better.
By the way, almost nobody pokes anybody on Facebook, so I'd lose that too.
Quote: leigh Stirrup @ January 22 2012, 7:17 PM GMTGary Glitter has got out of prison, found himself a job in a dog grooming parlour, God help them puppies. Finally explains what the song leader of the pack was about.
Dont get dog grooming how would you even start.
Do you just poke them on facebook
Do you watch them coming out of puppy school
Hi Little doggy , what nice ears you got.
Takes being an animal lover to a whole new level.What do you think of this, does it work better without the mention of kids.
I think that's excelent.
Quote: Badge @ January 22 2012, 7:23 PM GMTSo, you now think it's good to open with a paedo joke because it has a Gary Glitter reference? I despair! Your post contradicts everything else you've said!
Well the first version risked belittling the expersience of people suffering abuse. And even potentially sympathysing with abusers.
The improved version switches to mocking a well known hate figure. ANd implying his perfidy has just found another target.
My overall advice would be move or lose the joke either version if possible.
Don't start doing Gary Glitter material, the moment he is mentioned I would be inwardly groaning and have turned off, waiting for the next person up.
Quote: leigh Stirrup @ January 22 2012, 7:17 PM GMTGary Glitter has got out of prison, found himself a job in a dog grooming parlour, God help them puppies. Finally explains what the song leader of the pack was about.
The joke doesn't even work.
'Leader of the Pack' is a song by The Shangri-Las. Glitter's song is 'Leader of the Gang'.
I don't say this often but Don is right.
So is Mr Stott.
F**k ignore me
Here's something I rarely say Don's right
This may also be why you need to think carefully about asking writers for advice, we tend to go for over analysis to the nth degree.
Albeit Badge still can't agree with you, the first joke is very important. Gambling on causing offence is not always a wise proposition.