Who's He Talking To (Animation)

Hello All

Early version of a short cartoon I'm making: http://youtu.be/Zj8TTmzvJ9o

Would like opinions before I make the final version (so I can change things accordingly). Any comments on the script, look, animation, sound, music, acting and anything else welcome.

(Video flickers at one point. Don't know why. Shall fix that)

Thanks!

I lol'd.

The animation looks very good btw, impressive.

Hi Yacob,

I'm sorry to say I didn't get it at first, perhaps you could make it a bit more topical by using a Scottish guy complaining about England instead?

Thanks Guys.

Quote: AngieBaby @ January 18 2012, 9:11 PM GMT

Hi Yacob,

I'm sorry to say I didn't get it at first, perhaps you could make it a bit more topical by using a Scottish guy complaining about England instead?

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That's not the point though.

I might be one of the only people who likes this. I don't know yet.

Just watched.

czeklent!

Quote: Yacob Wingnut @ January 18 2012, 9:28 PM GMT

That's not the point though.

I might be one of the only people who likes this. I don't know yet.

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You may need to explain it to me then, but hey, I bumped your thread and now you know AJ likes it too

Quote: Yacob Wingnut @ January 18 2012, 9:28 PM GMT

I might be one of the only people who likes this. I don't know yet.

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Ha! Well, I'm not with you this time, though I really like the filing cabinets.

Quote: AngieBaby @ January 18 2012, 9:39 PM GMT

You may need to explain it to me then, but hey, I bumped your thread and now you know AJ likes it too

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Yes, big thanks for the bump! And thanks to AJGO, Sootyj and Badge for commenting.

I feel a bit weird explaining it though. Hmmmmmm.

Great animation and it's funny to look at, but I didn't get the Czech reference really.

I dunno it made me laugh. Animation looks ace.

I don't get the Czech reference either, unless it's just meant to be random thing that isn't a Horse.

Looks and sounds good though.

Thanks Peeps.

Quote: ShoePie @ January 18 2012, 10:44 PM GMT

unless it's just meant to be random thing that isn't a Horse.

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Yes, that's it.

Maybe I should change the Czech Republic into something a little more obscure to make it clear that there isn't any kind of intended reference.

Quote: Yacob Wingnut @ January 18 2012, 10:52 PM GMT

Maybe I should change the Czech Republic into something a little more obscure to make it clear that there isn't any kind of intended reference.

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The punchline fails primarily because the 'Who's He Talking To?' question doesn't feature in the actual sketch.

Jokes need to be set up, given a foundation. You seem to have forgotten this.

Quote: don rushmore @ January 18 2012, 10:59 PM GMT

The punchline fails primarily because the 'Who's He Talking To?' question doesn't feature in the actual sketch.

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My initial reaction is to disagree. We see a man talking to someone off-screen, so 'Who's he talking to?' would be a reasonable question for a viewer to ask (I'm not saying the sketch works or doesn't; only that I don't understand your perspective with this point).

From your point of view, in what way is it not set-up? Or (possibly a better question) how should it be set-up?