Our 4th sketch

Hello,

Our fourth sketch is here, why not watch it and tell us why it's shit? http://www.youtube.com/watch?feature=player_embedded&v=qUKTASULEjU

Cheers

It's shit because... No...sorry.

The build up went on a bit too long and the punchline (I'm a gay) was already obvious the second the farmer said in answer to wifey questions, 'No..I...'
Over all could have been a lot stronger.

Thought the acting was great and thorougly enjoyed watching you idiots. Good filming and voice-overs.
Will have a meander through your other stuff.

A bit of 'umility is very welcome round here, bertnews.

Obviously the sketch is not really a build up to the gay punchline so I won't comment on that.

It's pretty well acted and crucially you are all engaging performers. It's not hilarious but it is well written.

You could speed it up a bit for the viewers by shooting some cut aways and close-ups. Two shots isn't enough for this length of material.

It's not a bad idea.

I like the idea of the poshos appearing from nowhere and getting it wrong.

But the middle bit is neither wild enough nor quick enough (ooher)
e.g. if he's in the meat business really amp up the cruelty and madness.

And the punch doesn't work. I think it's more logically pleasing if he actually f**ks the cows.

It's not a bad idea.

I like the idea of the poshos appearing from nowhere and getting it wrong.

But the middle bit is neither wild enough nor quick enough (ooher)
e.g. if he's in the meat business really amp up the cruelty and madness.

And the punch doesn't work. I think it's more logically pleasing if he actually f**ks the cows.

Quote: Godot Taxis @ January 15 2012, 8:26 AM GMT

It's pretty well acted and crucially you are all engaging performers. It's not hilarious but it is well written.

You could speed it up a bit for the viewers by shooting some cut aways and close-ups. Two shots isn't enough for this length of material.

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Yes a few more shots would have been a good idea, sadly we were in a race against the weather to get it done.

Thanks for the feedback.

Quote: sootyj @ January 15 2012, 8:41 AM GMT

But the middle bit is neither wild enough nor quick enough (ooher)
e.g. if he's in the meat business really amp up the cruelty and madness.

And the punch doesn't work. I think it's more logically pleasing if he actually f**ks the cows.

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Yeh we could have gone more 'extreme' in the middle.

I think we decided against him shagging animals after our last sketch involving being in love with a Turkey. However, I am fairly certain animal sex will be back on the agenda in the not too distant future.

Thanks for watching and commenting.

Quote: ShirleyMcFurley @ January 12 2012, 3:14 PM GMT

Thought the acting was great and thorougly enjoyed watching you idiots. Good filming and voice-overs.
Will have a meander through your other stuff.

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Thank you very much!

Quote: bertnews @ January 16 2012, 4:03 PM GMT

Yeh we could have gone more 'extreme' in the middle.

I think we decided against him shagging animals after our last sketch involving being in love with a Turkey. However, I am fairly certain animal sex will be back on the agenda in the not too distant future.

Thanks for watching and commenting.

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I think the heart of the problem for me is why don't they like gayness?