All Tied Up: First Comedy Sketch

Here is my first comedy sketch.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ownjBRTOduc

Short Film : All Tied Up
Year of production : 2011
Genre: Comedy/ Action
Cast: Ant Richardson, Callum Thomson, Daniel Kenyon
Director: Ant Richardson, Callum Thomson
Writer: Callum Thomson
Music: Kevin MacLeod

Synopsis: A man finds his flat mate tied up and gagged in a cupboard with the robbers still in side the house. Instead of calling the police he decides to deal with the thieves himself.

Technical Info:
Camera: Canon 550D
Lens: 17-75mm 2.8
Sound: Zoom H4n
Editing and colour: Final Cut Pro

For more behind the scenes info, check out our blog http://fearlessfreakproductions.blogspot.com/

I appreciate any feedback you can give me

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ownjBRTOduc

Well it's nicely enough filmed but it doesn't really go anywhere, I mean whats the joke?

Well if I have to explain it then it's lost on you. Thanks for watching anyway and I understand my comedy isn't for everyone

That's a brilliant sentiment.

I look forward to you getting your first sketch show on BBC 234590
the channel dedicated to ctbullet and the people who "get his humour."

Probably still get more viewers than BBC3

The reason I said that is because it isn't one obvious joke, there's a few. Its more of a buddy apartment style comedy film than sketch.

Did you at least see the comedy merit or laugh at any point?

No 'fraid not. It's got potential but something that short where you don't really get time to develop characters needs more of a punchline.

Also the 3 jokes

1 Ignores mate in the cupboard because he wasn't expecing to see him
2 Over estimating ability at karate
3 And revealing fight was actually a dishonest recitation.

Are all really, really old. There might be some other stuff in there but nothing fresh.

I think if you can think of a more definitive and original way to end the sketch you maybe onto something.

Fair enough, thanks

Might be better without the music.

I liked the gag where the recognition in the untied lad's face leads us to think he has realised something isn't right under the stairs, but is in fact just returning for a scarf.

I also liked the skid on the spatula, great visual gag.

The music was off putting and I think it would have been better if the lad who was tied up was gagged better, and was making more of an effort to be rescued.
If the other lad had headphones on it would give a bit of comedy believabily as to why he hasn't noticed his mate (the musci could be played when he had the phones it etc.).

Nice one

Thanks guys

I think headphones would have really helped sell the gag more