INT. HOME.
CHRIS TARRANT IS SITTING ON AN ARMCHAIR BESIDE A LOG FIRE AND A XMAS TREE. HE IS SUPPING ON SOME MULLED WINE. HE OPENS A LEATHER-BOUND BOOK AND BEGINS TO READ.
CHRIS:
Tiswas the night before Christmas.
HE GETS COVERED WITH A BIG PILE OF GREEN GUNGE FROM ABOVE.
I like it but perhaps not so much the reveal:
I think that could be more 'tiswassy'
Maybe your ending - and also being flanned and a bucket of water too.
Thanks Stephen. May you get what you want from Santa.
I don't even think you need the end.
"Tiswas the night before Christmas" was funny enough for the ending. Funnier, in my opinion, coz I laughed at that bit and thought you could lose the ending about the gunk. But maybe in a visual sense it might work...hmmm. Helpful, non?
Just my opinion, but yeah, liked it.
Paul
Agree with above, leave out the gunge. Throwing gunge/custard pies etc is not funny unless you're still hiring a clown for your birthday.
Goodlad has it right for me - get the flan-flinger and some buckets of water in there. This is what they want!
Like this one Nigel.
For what it was I liked it.
This made me smile.. I thought the gunge bit worked for me personally..
I'd leave the gunge in so long as there's no visual clues that it's on the cards.
Totally Brilliant!
To be honest I was a bit too young and too well brought up to watch ITV, I was a 'Going Live' child, I still found it funny though.
I didn't mind the gunge - would be great as part of a recurring theme of gungeing in a sketch show.
Please read my Christmas special - I know its a bit longer than yours!
Cheers.