Quote: Nigel Kelly @ January 8, 2008, 4:31 PMI only pray that Jerf constructed houses better than he has sentences.
I'm sure hes very proud of his erections 
How to write a critique. Page 2
Nigel from Northern Ireland. How about yer. Bit of Jim MacDonald there so it is. Your type of criticism is what I mean, Negative, Please be positive( that's the opposite of negative)
For example; Do you pray for nothing else but my houses and sentences?
I pray that Jerf constructed houses better than his sentences,is the correct version. You were mixing your past tense with your conjoiners this makes your prepersitions invalid especially if used before adverbs or after adjectives, and NEVER NEVER in between. It's all in my two publications( books) Grammar made Simple, and the A level version, Grammar made Difficult.
Quote: Rob B @ January 8, 2008, 12:22 AM3. Always point out that the script you've written was much better than theirs and it still got rejected.
I hope this is not a reference to my 'critique' of your 'Snapper' idea!!
I did mention one of my old scripts, but only to say that it has all the flaws yours does; I didn't say it was any better.
It is better, of course, but then I would say that wouldn't I...? 
Seriously though, I'll dig it out of the critique graveyard and you can see (I've redrafted it since but I can still feel a vague knowledge that it's not as good as it should be... it's one of those hanger-on things you write when you're about 15 and can't bear to let go of).
As for critique, I'd say there are 2 main areas: what the idea is and how it is expressed. Both can be in for analysis, the latter usually more than the former.
I think a sitcom can be broken down into characterisation and plot, which can be broken down further and further into areas like 'setting' etc. So long as any opinion is supported with valid reasons though, I don't see a problem. Can't always be too analytical. It's comedy.
Quote: Jerf Roberwitz @ January 7, 2008, 11:15 PMIt is far more constructive to say. Your work reads like a leaflet explaining the assembly of flat-pack furniture. Than, "I didn't like it",and
"No,I didn't like it iether". and, "I like funny jokes like," (listen to this)
A man has a heart attack every 2mins and,(wait for it)he's fed up with it.
Try more helpful remarks, for instance. Your work reads like a reply from the Ministry of Health and Social Security.Well there it is, a few handy tips. Please add your own.
It is far more constructive to say: "Your work reads like a leaflet explaining the assembly of flat-pack furniture"; than "I didn't like it", "No, I didn't like it either", or... "I like funny jokes like (listen to this) 'A man has a heart attack every 2 mins and, (wait for it) he's fed up with it!"
Try more helpful remarks; for instance, "Your work reads like a reply from the Ministry of Health and Social Security."
Well, there it is - a few handy tips. Please add your own.
Having re-written what you wrote, I now realise that the problem was you used a full stop before an example.
My next door neighbour, Don from Oxford, won't be pleased.
Quote: Jerf Roberwitz @ January 7, 2008, 11:15 PMIt is far more constructive to say. Your work reads like a leaflet explaining the assembly of flat-pack furniture. Than, "I didn't like it",and
"No,I didn't like it iether". and, "I like funny jokes like," (listen to this)
A man has a heart attack every 2mins and,(wait for it)he's fed up with it.
Try more helpful remarks, for instance. Your work reads like a reply from the Ministry of Health and Social Security.Well there it is, a few handy tips. Please add your own.
Its more constructive to say why you didnt like, rather than just trying to sound funny. Just say what didnt work, in your opinion, and why.
Quote: Jerf Roberwitz @ January 8, 2008, 7:24 PMMy next door neighbour, Don from Oxford, won't be pleased.
I'm sure he'll get over it. I have.
It's a strange irony that most of, I said most of, the contributors to this comedy site have no sense of humour.
Quote: Jerf Roberwitz @ January 10, 2008, 8:35 PMIt's a strange irony that most of, I said most of, the contributors to this comedy site have no sense of humour.
And there it is!
It's a bit easy to claim superiority by tying people in knots by acting in an odd manner and confusing everyone, though.
Hi Jerf!
Yer pal,
Frankie xxx
P.S. My LOL and cheery hello constitute neither agreement nor disagreement with any statements by BSG members or the site operator!
Quote: Jerf Roberwitz @ January 10, 2008, 8:35 PMIt's a strange irony that most of, I said most of, the contributors to this comedy site have no sense of humour.
Show us the way Jerf I beg you
..bate taken!
"Bate"?
Jerf is the 'master' of that!
It's a feeding frenzy!
The waters are writhing with 'bators!